Tomorrow!

Tomorrow!

A magic land of sorrow evanescence,
A flying moment of childish dreams and hopes…

Tomorrow!

A century that spreads from birth to moments
when you are so faint to face it and to cope …

Tomorrow!

A pray for change, and ever staying ghosts
of yesterday commitments and betrayals…

Tomorrow!

You stonily seduce with your illusive pledges!!!
Tomorrow, YOU make me strong!
                              YOU change my world today…

Reviews

[外人 (Gaiji..]

There's a lot of technical stuff i'd like to comment, but since anyway you tell you don't care about it, let me get straight to where i talk about the theme of the poem and give my personal impressions: I loved the theme you've chosen, tomorrow is interesting and appealing :) Your poem has a great flow, and it's very deep.
Great job =D

[Igor G. Balatsky]

Сильно и стильно! Однако, Bы не только тонкий лирик, но и мудрый философ. Какое удоbольстbие читать Вас, слоbно Книгу тайн...
Пусть сbетлым будет Bаше Заbтра и радостным - тbое Сейчас!

[MOON]

Very good , the belief that tomorrow will be better !

[S. Michael Long]

i like this, you use slant rhyme in a few of the stanzas, but and i hate this part, im not very quick to give out my thoughts to people i haven't friend-ed yet but, i caught a cliche' on the evanescence stanza, its probably just me, but i think we probably relate a lot in our writing.. i could be wrong.. either way.. nice write -s

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the positive feel of this poem. Led the reader on a journey to know happiness and forget the past. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Forest Green]

Made me grin...not sure why.

But I like this poem...it's quite an original and got some truth to it.

Nice work...

[Kat Wildd]

I love your view of tomorrow.

This is uplifting work. As I love to see the head up in people, always positive.
Thank you

[Revery]

Hope! Hope captured in words in the context of time, nice.

[Divinity Sleeps in This]

Nice, you should write about the future more often.