wet truth

Between him and me was the table…

In fact it was the most insignificant barrier!

Between him and myself

Is an ocean of unbearable pain

of unfulfilled desires…

BETWEEN US IS JUST MISTRUST

Why? Tell me why you see a threat in my open arm?

My only gun is my insightful gaze

Inside your “broken album” of … harm

Is indulgent and feelings can survive

My “wet ‘healing’ truth” is just a mirror of your groaning  life …

Reviews

[S. Michael Long]

SICK... (in the slang term) this is a sick poem. there are a few, areas, where a novice reader may get confused, you talk about seeing the threat in your open arm, ( i knew what you were getting at) but, many readers may get lost and walk away before they read the next line, when you explain your drive ( my only gun is my insightful gaze) to me, those are the most powerful moments of the poem. Yet still, i think you can refine them and give the two lines more direction.. AIM FOR THE READER (: I also loved your use of CAPS in lines and your use of capitols in words, but remember to be careful so that you dont Over, or Under-emphasise your point.. I loved reading your writing!

[Blindfolded]

Passionate and honest. I feel your pain in this piece, a great read and write.

[Igor G. Balatsky]

'On the first day of war
and the first day of peace 
we cannot believe it is true'.

[Who Cares]

Intense, this was a good read. Passsionate and beautiful, your words are powerful indeed.

[Eagle Cruagh]

This is a pretty intimate denial of
his manly charms, a plea for help
with open arms.
'With time we settle most disputes
Perhaps it is transent with no repute.
----- John

[Revery]

Intense and passionate. Getting the poison out as some would say. The passion which you write with is your strength. On top of that you build your verse with strong imagery. It is a bit cryptic but rightfully so.

[Divinity Sleeps in This]

Haha amusing, ironic too since the last picture I used in my poem there is a tatoo of a gun on the actor.