Moment of Truth

short and sour

"Everything you said,
was anything really true?"
"Of course not, you fool."

Reviews

[Adam Adams]

Very eye--catching words. Your short & simple words shown me a great clip of emotionally romantic movie, somehow. When the man's in love with woman of hearts, he certainly goes lost in her. Every single word she speaks to him's bewitched by him which further makes him lost somewhere into his own mazes of mind -- the labyrinths (realism) of her words. Liked the concept. Nice imagery.

[Nomenklatura]

Thanks very much for reading and for commenting in depth
Ewan

[Roland Petrov]

Haiku with a bite. I love it. Probably should have an exclamation mark after "fool". I think that would give it more of a punch.

[Nomenklatura]

hmm... no. I think the lack of the exclamation mark shows that the person saying "you fool" is saying it not with annoyance, just with weary indifference.

[Roland Petrov]

In that case, how about a title change to "Moment of Weary Indifference"?

[Nomenklatura]

Nope, have to disagree there too... the person has been indifferent for some time, this is the moment where she tells the truth.