I like how "Beyond" and "The Vanishing" are portraits of half a person missing his other half. Scenes of loneliness pocked with memories of still vibrant love. It's like watching a man waltz with a ghost: heartbreaking and captivating. I can sense loss is a major driver for some of your 'scenes' or 'moments' -- in an airport coffee bar or hotel in town. Your choice of words and overall voice are genuine, human, and not overly-frilly -- perhaps flowery in sentiment only -- but your content and delivery sting of truth.
Posted 10 Years Ago
3 of 3 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
Thank you very much Kyle, you have caught the essence of what drove me to write this, and the Vanish.. read moreThank you very much Kyle, you have caught the essence of what drove me to write this, and the Vanishing piece, as well of many of the other things I have posted on here. Your review is validation for me that I am being successful in portraying that.
I like this moment you wrote about.. short, but you conveyed such sentiment in these lines.. very good. Noel!!
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
Thank you, based on the poems you have written so well, I am happy that this work touched you as you.. read moreThank you, based on the poems you have written so well, I am happy that this work touched you as yours are so good and the meaning so clear.
10 Years Ago
thank you.. I wish I could be more concise..but it seems there is just so much to say..it's somet.. read more thank you.. I wish I could be more concise..but it seems there is just so much to say..it's sometimes hard to get it all in.. and make it rhyme as well..
Ha ha, that seems to be my problem in prose I can go on forever, but in poems I tend to be short, fe.. read moreHa ha, that seems to be my problem in prose I can go on forever, but in poems I tend to be short, few words, and if something rhymes, it was probably an accident. : )
10 Years Ago
I have no idea why I started writing rhymes.. I can write some things.. free verse... but it's just.. read moreI have no idea why I started writing rhymes.. I can write some things.. free verse... but it's just so much easier the rhyming way..
10 Years Ago
And it is those things that make writing and reading so interesting, so many different ways to expre.. read moreAnd it is those things that make writing and reading so interesting, so many different ways to express our thoughts and feelings to others, in an attempt to help them, and us, to understand, just a little bit more.
this is different,,I can see you were thinking out loud perhaps? lol
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
Free versing in text messages, at the time actually. Didn't realize it until later that it was a poe.. read moreFree versing in text messages, at the time actually. Didn't realize it until later that it was a poem. only changed a few words.
About to have a double espresso.
Sometimes it is the little things
we can take joy in. ..Isn't that the truth! very good..I like this, it's short and sweet.
I like how "Beyond" and "The Vanishing" are portraits of half a person missing his other half. Scenes of loneliness pocked with memories of still vibrant love. It's like watching a man waltz with a ghost: heartbreaking and captivating. I can sense loss is a major driver for some of your 'scenes' or 'moments' -- in an airport coffee bar or hotel in town. Your choice of words and overall voice are genuine, human, and not overly-frilly -- perhaps flowery in sentiment only -- but your content and delivery sting of truth.
Posted 10 Years Ago
3 of 3 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
Thank you very much Kyle, you have caught the essence of what drove me to write this, and the Vanish.. read moreThank you very much Kyle, you have caught the essence of what drove me to write this, and the Vanishing piece, as well of many of the other things I have posted on here. Your review is validation for me that I am being successful in portraying that.
// Wish you were sitting across
this tall table from me,
Looking like you did last night. //
Wow, that stanza just hit the home run, Noel. This was amazing. I'm jealous you went to Frankfurt too!
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
Thank you so much for your review. The odd part of this was on this particular flight, I was not sup.. read moreThank you so much for your review. The odd part of this was on this particular flight, I was not supposed to go through that gate, but extreme weather in the US caused me to reroute on a different flight. I then got to go to Beyond, I like their coffee, and for an airport gate, their "ambience" is actually not too bad. Sitting at the table, enjoying the double espresso, these words came into my head. I wrote them months ago, and just came across them again the other day, decided to share them, and am so pleased that they have touched a number of my friends here. I never expected that sort of reaction to this. I am very pleased to have touched others with the words.
Wow. Romantic. I love how you wrote this like a gentleman...a gentleman never kisses and tells. Two ships passing in the night.
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
Well, I not always a gentleman, I may have to kiss and tell in some feeble imitation of your hotter .. read moreWell, I not always a gentleman, I may have to kiss and tell in some feeble imitation of your hotter poems some day. Thanks for reading and reviewing this little effort.
Something tells me you would make my poems read a lot hotter if you re-wrote them...:)
10 Years Ago
I think based on some of the reviews of your poems by the ladies on here, you are already hitting a .. read moreI think based on some of the reviews of your poems by the ladies on here, you are already hitting a lot of "hot" buttons, Ron. : )
10 Years Ago
-blushing- They should get to know you better Noel. They would be breaking your door down to...um we.. read more-blushing- They should get to know you better Noel. They would be breaking your door down to...um well they would be breaking your door down :)