The Queen

Another of my old works being dusted off to be reviewed. This was co-written by a person known as Lhyla Allegory and myself.

Lhyla:

 

The vivid beauty one might see

The Silken dress fanned in pride

Prismatic colors wont subside

A scarlet gold flash upon her crown

She has your attention as the queen

No other face could meet

One so rare with a voice so sweet

Pure poetry as easy she glides

Shining through her heart of gold

A rainbow vision with wings that unfold.

 

 

Myself:

 

Quite right! No other face could meet

One so rare with a voice so sweet

But look underneath that scarlet gold crown

Did I witness a tear? A frown?

Suddenly the vision ceases to be clear

Contentment with her is replaced by fear

You say Queen?

A queen rules one. One castle; one kingdom

I say Empress!

For through that shining heart of gold

She captured hearts in numbers untold

She glides and flies upon souls!

Souls trapped;only her as their goal

I see that rainbow vision for what it is:

A lie.

she has no heart, so she consumes others; she is ever lost, ever sad.

Fie!

Though to the truth I have arrived

Im lost to the colors that won't subside...

Reviews

[Sylla Rege'ne]

And yet somehow I feel sympathy for the Empress Queen. She obviously is great, but living a lie.....and everyone will either fall stupid for her, or abandon her alltogether, as you seemed to have done. Remind us of anyone? The off-rhyme, rhyme, off-rhyme is not exactly a favorite of mine, but somehow it works perfectly here........and yet I wonder who the queen was to both of you..........some mysteries are best left unsolved, correct, prince? There also is almost a pre-Tommy reference here, too. If you recall, they thought he was perfect, until they saw that he was simply exactly like them. The queen seemed perfect, until you revealed that she is troubled, much like all humans "Did I witness a tear? A frown?".