Coloring Book

How do we know reality from

Dreamland?

We are puppets without strings

Controlled by words,

           Looks, and

      Desires

We dance to the melody

Our minds play

We dress to the standards

The world sets

We color inside the lines

Don’t mix yellow and blue

Then we sing ourselves to sleep

Like a mother to a child

One eye closes then the other

In our dreams our

Mind is quiet and only then

Do we find ourselves

Seeing green

Author's Note

Thanks for reading! Opinions?

Reviews

[Emily Feret]

We color inside the lines

I really loved this line, but I absolutely loved this whole piece, start to finish. What an idea that the mind is really free as we dream! It is also true that people become one of this world and contort themselves to try to fit into what everyone wants them to be. Amazing

[Jackie]

Thanks(: And (as you can see) I totally agree!

[Azriel]

great piece, with such an important message and serves as a great look at society. also loved your descriptions, really loved these lines as well:
"We color inside the lines
Don’t mix yellow and blue
Then we sing ourselves to sleep
Like a mother to a child"

overall a wonderful poem.

[Jackie]

I really appreciate you reading this(:

[Cookie]

Nice writing...it was very vivid ,Good job Jackie!

[Jackie]

Thanks so much!

[Nick Arouet]

Very, very insightful! I love this poem, especially because you tried to make a physical sort of appeal when you break looks and desires. Not many poets on this site try to do that. I forget what it's called, I haven't taken a literature class in a while, but I like that you put meaning in not only the words of your poem, but also the structure! This sort of thing is really appealing to me because it shows me that you really put some thought into the poem rather than writing down random words and hoping people will look at it. Very, very well done. The words, also, are beautifully meaningful and I just feel you put effort into this. :D

[Jackie]

Haha(: Thanks so much! I personally like poems that are appealing to the eyes and are not just straight down the page.