Let Me Give My Heart to You

Let me let you break my heart in two

Let me give my heart to you

Let me let you split it in two

Let me give you something no one else has

Let me give you my heart locked in Alcatraz

I know you’re gonna break me

I know you said you won’t 

I know when you say, “I love you”

I know you mean you don’t

It’s hard for me to trust you

It’s hard for me to stay

It’s hard for me not to love you

But my brain doesn’t get a say

My heart likes to control me

My heart speaks so blaringly

It’s been broken so many times

I fear no one will care for me

So let me give my heart to you

Let me let you split it in two

Let me let you be the one for which I settle

While I sit here counting flower petals…

Author's Note

I saw this picture online and thought, "I could make a poem outta that"
So I did :) Keeping my negligent boyfriend, who hasn't talked or answered a text from me in like two weeks, in mind while I made it :)
I couldn't decide which picture would go better with the poem, so I just put two.
As always, comments/reviews are welcome!! ❤️

Reviews

[Kari Rakitan]

Interesting thoughts. Personally, I found that after my first heartbreak, I was more afraid of breaking someone else's heart than I was of having my heart broken again.

[Nix is typing...]

I feel that way, too!!! I've always hated hurting other people's feelings, so I was always scared someone was going to break my heart less than me breaking theirs.
Thanks for your review, Kari!!!

[T.S. Ulmus]

"let me let you be the one for which I settle" I had to read that line three times. It is a very powerful sentiment though. All told it is a very skillful piece with all of the narrative talent we've come to expect out of you.

[Nix is typing...]

😁
Thanks, Ts. That always means a lot coming from such an esteemed colleague like you.

[Caleb is typing...]

"Let me give my heart to you
Let me let you split it in two
Let me give you something no one else has
Let me give you my heart locked in Alcatraz"

Powerful rhyme there for sure! I love the emotion here and feel it personally. Relatable, and well-written. Congrats :)

[Nix is typing...]

Lol, I'm sure you can feel that about Ellie a lot.
"I know you’re gonna break me
I know you said you won’t
I know when you say, “I love you”
I know you mean you don’t"

I'm surprised you didn't say anything about Ellie xD

[Caleb is typing...]

Ahahahahahahaha you're write I forgot to right that xD.
100% feel that about Ellie, or at least felt

[Just Kim]

This is really good, I loved your first stanza, a lot. I can feel the emotions

[Nix is typing...]

Thanks, Kim :) I'm glad my poetry conveyed emotion :)

[dw817]

Not to completely corrupt you but that picture you have reminds me a great deal of "Saladfingers." A most creepy Flash animation you can likely find out Youtube.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tP6w22ToHgc

As for your poem, I think you and one of the characters in my story, Lilly, would get along marvelously.

I like this line.

"Let me let you be the one for which I settle."

It means that you are in such strong communication with "the one you settle for" that they in fact make the decision for you that they are good enough for you. That is really marvelous and worded quite timid and shy ...

Rating: 100/100

Oh, and thanks for the friendship request !
Be warned you now enter the world of Dev and his quirky friends. :)

[Nix is typing...]

Lol, I'd love to enter into your little world 😁🤪
I just looked up Saladfingers, it looks like it would be a funny thing to watch. Not much disturbs me, lol. Thanks for that rating :)))
I really appreciate this review :) Happy to make your acquaintance. :)

Nix ❤️

[dw817]

It's a busy world, 4-books, the 4th not even finished yet and hundreds of chapters, Nix:

read moreIt's a busy world, 4-books, the 4th not even finished yet and hundreds of chapters, Nix:

https://www.writerscafe.org/writing/dw817/2111233/

Click the grey box to bring up the chapter. Give me a call out in comments if you have any questions, and thanks !

[Nix is typing...]

Uh...what was the "read more" about? Wc likes to be a b*tch sometimes when it comes to loading and the read more stuff. I'm just glad they changed the captcha

[dw817]

Agh, my mistake, Nix ! Never ever end a text with a colon in here or sometimes it eats your words !
Let me redo that.
- - -
It's a busy world, 4-books, the 4th not even finished yet and hundreds of chapters, Nix (not typing a colon this time)

https://www.writerscafe.org/writing/dw817/2111233/

Click the gray box to bring up the chapter.

If you have any queries, comments, or kerosone, feel free to put them in the comment section. Hope to see you there !

[Nix is typing...]

Lol "kerosene" I love that xD I definitely will. :3