I saw this picture online and thought, "I could make a poem outta that"
So I did :) Keeping my negligent boyfriend, who hasn't talked or answered a text from me in like two weeks, in mind while I made it :)
I couldn't decide which picture would go better with the poem, so I just put two.
As always, comments/reviews are welcome!! ❤️
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Interesting thoughts. Personally, I found that after my first heartbreak, I was more afraid of breaking someone else's heart than I was of having my heart broken again.
Posted 3 Years Ago
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3 Years Ago
I feel that way, too!!! I've always hated hurting other people's feelings, so I was always scared so.. read moreI feel that way, too!!! I've always hated hurting other people's feelings, so I was always scared someone was going to break my heart less than me breaking theirs.
Thanks for your review, Kari!!!
"let me let you be the one for which I settle" I had to read that line three times. It is a very powerful sentiment though. All told it is a very skillful piece with all of the narrative talent we've come to expect out of you.
Posted 3 Years Ago
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3 Years Ago
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Thanks, Ts. That always means a lot coming from such an esteemed colleague like you.
"Let me give my heart to you
Let me let you split it in two
Let me give you something no one else has
Let me give you my heart locked in Alcatraz"
Powerful rhyme there for sure! I love the emotion here and feel it personally. Relatable, and well-written. Congrats :)
Posted 3 Years Ago
3 Years Ago
Lol, I'm sure you can feel that about Ellie a lot.
"I know you’re gonna break me
I .. read moreLol, I'm sure you can feel that about Ellie a lot.
"I know you’re gonna break me
I know you said you won’t
I know when you say, “I love you”
I know you mean you don’t"
I'm surprised you didn't say anything about Ellie xD
3 Years Ago
Ahahahahahahaha you're write I forgot to right that xD.
100% feel that about Ellie, or at lea.. read moreAhahahahahahaha you're write I forgot to right that xD.
100% feel that about Ellie, or at least felt
Not to completely corrupt you but that picture you have reminds me a great deal of "Saladfingers." A most creepy Flash animation you can likely find out Youtube.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tP6w22ToHgc
As for your poem, I think you and one of the characters in my story, Lilly, would get along marvelously.
I like this line.
"Let me let you be the one for which I settle."
It means that you are in such strong communication with "the one you settle for" that they in fact make the decision for you that they are good enough for you. That is really marvelous and worded quite timid and shy ...
Rating: 100/100
Oh, and thanks for the friendship request !
Be warned you now enter the world of Dev and his quirky friends. :)
Posted 3 Years Ago
3 Years Ago
Lol, I'd love to enter into your little world 😁🤪
I just looked up Saladfingers, it look.. read moreLol, I'd love to enter into your little world 😁🤪
I just looked up Saladfingers, it looks like it would be a funny thing to watch. Not much disturbs me, lol. Thanks for that rating :)))
I really appreciate this review :) Happy to make your acquaintance. :)
Nix ❤️
3 Years Ago
It's a busy world, 4-books, the 4th not even finished yet and hundreds of chapters, Nix:
read moreIt's a busy world, 4-books, the 4th not even finished yet and hundreds of chapters, Nix:
Uh...what was the "read more" about? Wc likes to be a b*tch sometimes when it comes to loading and t.. read moreUh...what was the "read more" about? Wc likes to be a b*tch sometimes when it comes to loading and the read more stuff. I'm just glad they changed the captcha
3 Years Ago
Agh, my mistake, Nix ! Never ever end a text with a colon in here or sometimes it eats your words !<.. read moreAgh, my mistake, Nix ! Never ever end a text with a colon in here or sometimes it eats your words !
Let me redo that.
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It's a busy world, 4-books, the 4th not even finished yet and hundreds of chapters, Nix (not typing a colon this time)
Uh, what can I say?
Hi! I'm Phoenix (Nix) 🔥
Most of my poems are in my books :) except for Phoenix Parker, that's a book I wrote last year.
Most of my writing is poetry, I'm always o.. more..