Salty Affection

This is something I wrote a long time ago but forgot how much I like it. Its sad but I thnk we've all been here.

I look up at her and she looks back

Assuring nothing but compassion

But there I watch the bluest oceans

Pain her cheeks with their salty affection

With trembling lips she smiles

But its a smile of deception

Who is she?

This is not me

And this is not my reflection

Reviews

[Lady V]

Short sweet and to the point. Sometimes we get so wrapped up in thw orld that we lose the essence of who we are. I must I have been there more times then I would like to admit but I have learned through it all that without being yourself then your destined to have fake people in your life. Once you become true to yourself then you will find people who will be true to u.


Live, Love and Learn

Lady V

[Gheeneil]

Whoa. Nic, this is beautifully written! I liked how you described the "crying" part. Clever choice of words, which gave a strong impact on this piece. Of course, I truly, truly liked these lines:

"bluest oceans
Pain her cheeks with their salty affection"

A brilliant write, as always. :)

[Susan]

I was confused at first. But then aha! So many times we look in to the mirror and see somebody else that is us, but not us. very good poem. lots of depth and emotions.

[Seracies]

At the beginning, I thought it was about two different people, and so I was surprised by the ending about the reflection in the mirror. It was interesting, and there was an edge of desperation to it, almost frantic but subtle. I enjoyed the mood of this one.

[Janice Ann]

OH MY! This is something that really just touches my heart. I love the lines and they are so simple yet they hold such complexity! Goodness...I loved this piece!

JaniceAnn

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

im really loving this poem. thanks lost rose for requesting it for me. short, but such a strong impact. i like the part abuot "decption" and how when you look at her, you can't undersatnd how you are with someone like that, esp considering who we date is a reflection of who we are. great write! i'll ad you as a friend.

Kena

[MagiCrystal]

Ok.. Absence sharpens love... presence strengthens it... Salty affection?.. hummm My this is very familiar.. also...Wrote by Mr. Rose.. so ... it tells me that.. this is one of your poems you love.. yes!

I see this.. in your poetry...a minute or a second in solitude..

[QuietPoet]

This was a deep write. And yes I've been there. This was truly a great write. Nicely done. I loved it.

[EILEEN McGUINNESS]

This is short and sweet and hits the spot long time no see how's life on the south coast?

[THE LOST ROSE]

Wow Nix if I could drop a poem like this I would consider myself a poet instead of a guy who writes stuff. I enjoyed this poem, the length is short but the thought provoking piece will live way pass this review. Excellent write. One of my favorites. I plan to share this with my other WC friends through read requests. Great write!