January Fires

January Fires

A Poem by Nix
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This is about January! Cold, cold January and her desire for fire, and the warmth that left frozen.

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In a place
That once brought her comfort
On the coldest night of the year,
She assembles herself - knees to her chest
And waits
For the very touch that warmed her
And gave her life
Has left her frozen.
Lifeless in front of a crackling fire.
Wood snaps,
Smoke rises,
Breaking her gaze as tears fold
In the creases of her eyes.
They do not fall.
She fears the end
As much as she fears her broken - breathing,
And that is the only thing
 
That keeps
 
Her heart
 
Beating.

© 2009 Nix


Author's Note

Nix
Written, January 2009.

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A chillingly effective image of inner emotional stasis meeting raw survival instinct.

This time of the year and the Capricorn zodiac cycle it coincides with is always about a slow unthawing after the passing of pre-Christmas cheer, Sagittarian humor to Capricornian sobriety.

Fearing one's own cessation of breath as much as the next inhalation is a harrowing condition, captured with painstaking and unflinching attention by your poetic lines.

Strong, honest, brave poem.

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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What a beautifully written sad piece so full of heart imagery. I like this piece pulls at the emotions a bit.



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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A very well written poem. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nixie,
What you've written here is a powerful moment of realization and melancholy.
Always have enjoyed your poetry.

Take care.
Punishment

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

So this cold is of the heart - not of the ambient temperature; the place that once warmed her is not the grate in front of her - her 'January-cold' place is the heart of another. Her twigs crackle and her wood burns but there is no warmth. What there is is fear - of death? Of no longer breathing? Of the unknown? Ah but fear is the great producer of determination, of will, of power over circumstance. Soon, the crackling, smoking wood will be blazing up the chimney, some warmth will begin to creep back and the world will seem a gradually better place.
smoothly and carefully expressed. An object lesson in metaphor, a recipe for survival.
John

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Hey there. Stopped by and caught this. Lovely description. The power is found through the word play and creative structure that enhances the focus of the piece. This kept me riveted to the end and I found no errors.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

very emotionally written. one can read alot in these words. Great writing

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I think this shows a lot of potential in your writing. I recently learnt that modern style poetry should not have capital letters at the beginning of each line unless this is for the start of a new line. The effect being that the whole sentence is worked through or made more static depending on how long the sentence is. Now all this works if you read the poem to yourself out loud - the bathroom is the best place.

Check out Carol Ann Duffy to see what I mean - http://www.contemporarywriters.com/authors/?p=auth104
or listen to Simon Armitage - http://www.poetryarchive.org/poetryarchive/singlePoet.do?poetId=87

Hope this is useful.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This one is terribly sad. You want to put your arm around her and tell her everything is going to be ok. You do a wonderful job of expressing emotion and it brings the whole poem to life. You can actually see her sitting there sorrowful and forlorn.

I've missed your poetry. This one was really very good.

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

A wonderful use of emotions in this piece. The imagery was well placed. Enjoyed the write. Phantom.....

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

A chillingly effective image of inner emotional stasis meeting raw survival instinct.

This time of the year and the Capricorn zodiac cycle it coincides with is always about a slow unthawing after the passing of pre-Christmas cheer, Sagittarian humor to Capricornian sobriety.

Fearing one's own cessation of breath as much as the next inhalation is a harrowing condition, captured with painstaking and unflinching attention by your poetic lines.

Strong, honest, brave poem.

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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