A flickering desire

The poem describes a small desire of a lonely heart .

Confronting all hardships,
dusk or dawn,
a desire still trembles and stays forever on.
The heart concealing restlessness,
is there an end to the tears flowing on,
or life is just a suffering that goes on and on ,
splendid seasons were not a wish , real wish for love still flickering, though life has almost gone !!!!!






*senora*

Author's Note

Would love to hear all negatives and positive .

Reviews

[KurKota]

I like this piece ! To me it conveys a sadness of circumstances you may be in.. or anyone for that matter. .... "a desire still trembles and stays forever on" ...very nice statement! I am confused as to why the long last line..... it disrupted the cadence....but that can be changed if you agree... otherwise, beautiful !

[The Nameless]

It's short, but it's good.
"A desire still trembles and stays forever on" - lovely line

Perhaps the last line could have been shorter, or could have moved onto the next line. But it doesnt really matter :P

Nice reading it =D