QUEST OF LIFE

this is about how one neglects his life ,pondering about this precious gift of nature unnecessarily

life is a cozy bed

then why am I always sad?

have I gone mad

or simply just trapped.

I don't know where to head 

when it has no trough or crest.

sometimes I do this, sometimes I do that

am I a cat or a rat?

to quest it out, I have sat

is it  a misconcept or a fact?

one day I met two princeton

one was sodium and other was krypton

the former showed me the bright new dawn

unfortunately I couldn't grasp it on

later I realised the tone

and my life rocked on..!! 

 

I know you too are in a trauma 

wondering about the life drama

the lesson is not to ponder

but to enjoy the wonder

because life is a cozy bed

& you always have to step ahead. 

Author's Note

Hey guys! sorry for ur inconvenience in reading the poem , so to rectify my mistake here is the explanation to the poem.
1. Life is such a warm and comfortable bed then why i am not happy ?.Has something gone wrong with me or i have been trapped in this puzzling life. I don't know what to do next when this life neither has a start (trough) nor an end(crest).
2.In this life race I am confused about my job,positions etc and then i compare myself with a cat or a rat that is question myself whether i am dominating and doing what i wish to do or just being carried away by the outside world. So, finally i have sat to analyse the situation and to find out if it happens to me only.
3.The day,when i had a dialogue with the almighty Lord brought a turning point in me He introduced me to the two different souls of mine that is sodium(reactive) and krypton(non reactive). The reactive soul taught me (krypton) the art to live, but being narrow minded I couldn't get the point but later when i gave it a deep thought i came across the real scenario of life.
As you already know , the motto of last stanza is to introduce the readers with the correct way of leading a life.

Reviews

[nathan]

I will be honest with you. The idea behind this piece is deep but I found that as I read along it started becoming tedious ergo my advice would be to work on it some more and cut out some unnecessary wording.
All in all i liked it. Keep the fire burning

[JanieB]

Great..love this! Bravo. :-)

[Matthew Ian Herrawood W]

Thanks for the reveiw. i liked this though im not sure about the rhyming i would try re writing this so it flows but without a rhyme. im not sure what exactly you mean in your 3rd stanza so id think about writing it diffrently. overall a good poem thats enjoyable but with a bit of work could be so much more.

[Kelley Quinn]

That was pretty good.
If the rhyme scheme was sarcastic then i liked it. but if you were trying to rhyme with virtue, you might want to make it sound less cheesy. but other than that i liked it!

[Elaenor Aisling]

A nice write, but I got lost a bit in the wording. Keep up the good work though! :)

[Yari Garcia (Older Prof..]

Very interesting. I used to write like this a lot when I was younger.

[o]

I like the message of the poem, it wasn't the conventional sort: To not wonder so much about what it all means or how it all fits together into a coherent whole. Life will never fully make sense, and you can't stop living until it does, otherwise you'll never live. Or at least that's what I took from it.

I did get lost in the "princeton" stanza though. I'm not sure what the sodium and krypton are meant to represent.
But overall I enjoyed it.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

We are all searching for the meaning of life. But it just might be that our life is the meaning which we give it. I believe our lives are not about what others do to us or what they do for us but about what we can do for others and how we treat others...and to me...that reveals the meaning of our lives. This was an interesting read.

[Muse]

This made me smile, thanks for the heads-up. I do agree with Nathan below.....less might be more here. Try eliminating some redundancy, it will make the message more short and powerful!

[manchilld99]

" ... the lesson is not to ponder
but to enjoy the wonder..."

--this is a good summary of the message and meaning I got from this poem. It is also the most succinctly worded point made here. I would suggest that other parts of the poem can be reduced somewhat to be more in keeping with this economical style.

Nice effort.