QUEST OF LIFE

this is about how one neglects his life ,pondering about this precious gift of nature unnecessarily

life is a cozy bed

then why am I always sad?

have I gone mad

or simply just trapped.

I don't know where to head 

when it has no trough or crest.

sometimes I do this, sometimes I do that

am I a cat or a rat?

to quest it out, I have sat

is it  a misconcept or a fact?

one day I met two princeton

one was sodium and other was krypton

the former showed me the bright new dawn

unfortunately I couldn't grasp it on

later I realised the tone

and my life rocked on..!! 

 

I know you too are in a trauma 

wondering about the life drama

the lesson is not to ponder

but to enjoy the wonder

because life is a cozy bed

& you always have to step ahead. 

Author's Note

Hey guys! sorry for ur inconvenience in reading the poem , so to rectify my mistake here is the explanation to the poem.
1. Life is such a warm and comfortable bed then why i am not happy ?.Has something gone wrong with me or i have been trapped in this puzzling life. I don't know what to do next when this life neither has a start (trough) nor an end(crest).
2.In this life race I am confused about my job,positions etc and then i compare myself with a cat or a rat that is question myself whether i am dominating and doing what i wish to do or just being carried away by the outside world. So, finally i have sat to analyse the situation and to find out if it happens to me only.
3.The day,when i had a dialogue with the almighty Lord brought a turning point in me He introduced me to the two different souls of mine that is sodium(reactive) and krypton(non reactive). The reactive soul taught me (krypton) the art to live, but being narrow minded I couldn't get the point but later when i gave it a deep thought i came across the real scenario of life.
As you already know , the motto of last stanza is to introduce the readers with the correct way of leading a life.

Reviews

[nathan]

I will be honest with you. The idea behind this piece is deep but I found that as I read along it started becoming tedious ergo my advice would be to work on it some more and cut out some unnecessary wording.
All in all i liked it. Keep the fire burning

[~Blue Fantasy~]

Very deep and meaningful! Beautifully written!

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Fantasti emotions and poetry, excellently written :)

[Sweets]

I loved this! :)
Great use of rhymes :)
and the ending has such a great flow!

[Poeticpiers]

interesting ideas One comment
Meter is important to writing good poetry
your repetitive sounds work well but somewords princeton dont make good sense
I think a little re editing would improve this considerably

[*** Hey Jude***]

I like the way you have shared such powerful emotions in a way that is inspiring! ~ Jude :-)

[emmajoy]

Many thanks for inviting me to read your poem. It's always more than satisfying to put thoughts and hopes in such a way; your newness makes this even more worthwhile and admirable. I'm not sure about the Princetown reference; plus, sometimes it's best not to explain in such detail to your reviewers, if they're invited to give an opinion, allow them to do so.

[Brianna Brie]

one day I met two princeton
one was sodium and other was krypton
the former showed me the bright new dawn
but I couldn't grasp it on
later I realized the tone
and my life rocked on..!!

I like your metaphor here. Very nice write...deep and inspirational.

[sweetfrog]

got the idea. good writing.;)

[GridLok]

The quest for 'the meaning of life', and insights gained along the way, have long been a source of inspiration for writers. Thank you for your contribution.

As has already been noted in other reviews, there are I think, aspects of your poem's structure and terminology that would benefit from reconsideration. Even though personal sensitivities are often integral to creative works, and as such even well meant critiques can be discomforting, contact reviewers who you think may be able to assist you in better conveying that which you wish to express.