QUEST OF LIFE

this is about how one neglects his life ,pondering about this precious gift of nature unnecessarily

life is a cozy bed

then why am I always sad?

have I gone mad

or simply just trapped.

I don't know where to head 

when it has no trough or crest.

sometimes I do this, sometimes I do that

am I a cat or a rat?

to quest it out, I have sat

is it  a misconcept or a fact?

one day I met two princeton

one was sodium and other was krypton

the former showed me the bright new dawn

unfortunately I couldn't grasp it on

later I realised the tone

and my life rocked on..!! 

 

I know you too are in a trauma 

wondering about the life drama

the lesson is not to ponder

but to enjoy the wonder

because life is a cozy bed

& you always have to step ahead. 

Author's Note

Hey guys! sorry for ur inconvenience in reading the poem , so to rectify my mistake here is the explanation to the poem.
1. Life is such a warm and comfortable bed then why i am not happy ?.Has something gone wrong with me or i have been trapped in this puzzling life. I don't know what to do next when this life neither has a start (trough) nor an end(crest).
2.In this life race I am confused about my job,positions etc and then i compare myself with a cat or a rat that is question myself whether i am dominating and doing what i wish to do or just being carried away by the outside world. So, finally i have sat to analyse the situation and to find out if it happens to me only.
3.The day,when i had a dialogue with the almighty Lord brought a turning point in me He introduced me to the two different souls of mine that is sodium(reactive) and krypton(non reactive). The reactive soul taught me (krypton) the art to live, but being narrow minded I couldn't get the point but later when i gave it a deep thought i came across the real scenario of life.
As you already know , the motto of last stanza is to introduce the readers with the correct way of leading a life.

Reviews

[nathan]

I will be honest with you. The idea behind this piece is deep but I found that as I read along it started becoming tedious ergo my advice would be to work on it some more and cut out some unnecessary wording.
All in all i liked it. Keep the fire burning

[Crowley]

Fitting words to help one keep from standing on ones foot when trying to move ahead. Apt....loved it.

[Seashell]

If only life was a cosy bed for everyone indeed. We have to venture in life, to gain, only then do we move on and in the right direction to benefit from our collected wisdom.
On the other hand..some people don't even get out of their cosy bed...how lazy and boring would that be ?
Thanks for share
Take care
Babs x

[Vinod Kumar U K]

Nice sentimental lines.........

[lark1311]

Nice work. I think maybe you should think about cutting it down a little as it gets a little repetitive with the rhyming. But all in all nice first post!

[Gns P]

Nice work dude. You must be a student of science. So am I. This poem has some integrated effet... Seems funny, philosophicas, emotional simultaneously... I dunnoe if i am mad... Bt it seems so... Great job done. Have a nice day. Good luck. See me on facebook. My user name is Monsieure Gns P.

[Andrew Wright]

I like it, my only word of advice is to watch the rhymes, because someties they felt kind o f forced and made the poem feel a little Dr.Seuss-ish. That goes with practice though, so keep at it!

[Kate Hunter]

overall well done with the idea, it flowed well. keep it up.

[Abysmal Savant]

interesting idea. I think you could expand the concept a bit further but it provokes thought and that is important. Another thing I like is that on the surface it seems simple but there is an underlining hidden wisdom to it and I'm glad that the excerp after the poem goes on to explain it because otherwise it may have been missed. Its a good piece but there is room for improvement as with each piece of work that anyone could submit-

[J Todd Underhill]

THE CONTEST YOU HAVE THIS IN SAYS IN 10 WORDS... MIGHT WANT TO FIX THAT.

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Your poem was self explanatory. I thought well written. Enjoyed your first piece.