QUEST OF LIFE

this is about how one neglects his life ,pondering about this precious gift of nature unnecessarily

life is a cozy bed

then why am I always sad?

have I gone mad

or simply just trapped.

I don't know where to head 

when it has no trough or crest.

sometimes I do this, sometimes I do that

am I a cat or a rat?

to quest it out, I have sat

is it  a misconcept or a fact?

one day I met two princeton

one was sodium and other was krypton

the former showed me the bright new dawn

unfortunately I couldn't grasp it on

later I realised the tone

and my life rocked on..!! 

 

I know you too are in a trauma 

wondering about the life drama

the lesson is not to ponder

but to enjoy the wonder

because life is a cozy bed

& you always have to step ahead. 

Author's Note

Hey guys! sorry for ur inconvenience in reading the poem , so to rectify my mistake here is the explanation to the poem.
1. Life is such a warm and comfortable bed then why i am not happy ?.Has something gone wrong with me or i have been trapped in this puzzling life. I don't know what to do next when this life neither has a start (trough) nor an end(crest).
2.In this life race I am confused about my job,positions etc and then i compare myself with a cat or a rat that is question myself whether i am dominating and doing what i wish to do or just being carried away by the outside world. So, finally i have sat to analyse the situation and to find out if it happens to me only.
3.The day,when i had a dialogue with the almighty Lord brought a turning point in me He introduced me to the two different souls of mine that is sodium(reactive) and krypton(non reactive). The reactive soul taught me (krypton) the art to live, but being narrow minded I couldn't get the point but later when i gave it a deep thought i came across the real scenario of life.
As you already know , the motto of last stanza is to introduce the readers with the correct way of leading a life.

Reviews

[nathan]

I will be honest with you. The idea behind this piece is deep but I found that as I read along it started becoming tedious ergo my advice would be to work on it some more and cut out some unnecessary wording.
All in all i liked it. Keep the fire burning

[cynicalbeliever]

Hey, don't know what to make of this quite honestly. Whilst the title and underlying message imply a good meaning the method is a decent attempt but flawed and dare I say...childish? The grammar,punctuation, etc is indeed flawed but generally I don't take those into consideration as my own work is flawed in such ways, however, text typing in my eyes is a complete break of tone and tempo...unless it's intended as part of the poem that is. Not a bad attempt for your first one dude, keep challenging yourself but maybe try varying the stanza's too?

Also, if you liked Falling or Saving Me try checking out A Letter To The Downtrodden on my page, not exactly light hearted reading but...

[iand63]

much improved flow

[EMF]

Yep. Second time of reading and it's still great. Still don't know why and don't care. Glad to read it again

[rose with love]

well I liked it, i think it has a good flow. i got stuck a little bit, it made my mind have second thoughts but it was ok in the end. well done

[Greg the Bard]

Stepping forward in life is a great topic and one you have done very well with. I like this a lot. The insight is true and yet still complicated. Thanks for a really good read.

[Jeremy Baker]

The expression is passionate but in places could be a little clearer. Nonetheless, an interesting message and some sharp observations make this an enjoyable read.

[Shayla Sayer]

amazing. i liked the was this poem flowed, and led you from line to line. great write!

[zig]

good one read mine too "a-hole says wtf?"

[Sindhuja Seshadri]

Lovely! Thanks for you comment on my poem!