A Tinge Of Orange Among The Gray

A Tinge of Orange Among the Gray

A tinge of orange among the gray,

A grotesque ditch, a violent fray.

The rising smoke, the blue-green bay;

“It’s all in the past!” that’s what they say.

 

A tinge of orange among the gray,

The sail blown down, there it lay.

The white-clad men, lost in play;

All disappeared by the end of May.

 

A tinge of orange among the gray,

The moth wings drifting, floating astray.

The hot pots burning made of clay;

Bubbling, bubbling, bubbling away.

 

A tinge of orange among the gray,

The black skies part, the white clouds stay.

The pink berries grow, in branches gay;

Until darkness lost; fay, fay.

Author's Note

Picture courtesy: Google

Reviews

[Blackheart]

Really loved the rhyming words you used in this piece. Also your concept of comparing lives with colors is also a stark comparison. Indeed life is similar to a palette of colours. Sometimes the days are bit of grey but then there are bright days like orange too. :)

[Nirupama.H]

Thanks for the comment :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing use of description.
"A tinge of orange among the gray,
The moth wings drifting, floating astray.
The hot pots burning made of clay;
Bubbling, bubbling, bubbling away."
I liked the above lines a lot. I enjoyed the complete poem and thank you Nirupama for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Nirupama.H]

Thank you. I'm really glad you liked it.

[Coyote Poetry]

I did and you are welcome.

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

So many soothing images here....I love how they're all combined with the theme of disintegration - it makes this poem have a distinctively forlorn mood.

[Nirupama.H]

Thanks a lot for reading and commenting on my poem.
I'm glad you liked it :)

[Deepa Ragunathan]

I have no idea what you tried to show, but all I saw was an image of a pyre, perhaps the funeral of a loved one? The orange of the flames, the way it is all now part of a past, themen in white, the pots of clay burning... also, grey is a sombre colour, a symbol of seriousness, of loss.
I may not be right, but that didn't stop me from being swept away by the words. Truly spectacular!!

[Nirupama.H]

Thank you ..
Like I've said to the others , the colours symbolize every contrast we see in life. Every " no "we said and every "yes" we did'nt say..
Hope that made sense :)

[Scott Thompson]

Enjoyable read... I will of course contemplate the symbolism which dull witted creatures such as myself may or may not properly fathom...maybe a little hint here and there in the authors notes would help slow-walk me to an epiphany! Loved the rhyme...Great work!!

[Nirupama.H]

Thank you .
Like I've said to the others , the colours symbolize every contrast we see in life. Every " no "we said and every "yes" we did'nt say..
Hope that made sense :)

[M P Ramesh]

nirupama,

Real flashes on collecting nature's bounty to the motionless words
Hope you have enjoyed its creation and the whispering of feathers of
WORDS during the process
Carry on pl.....

M P Ramesh

[Nirupama.H]

Thank you :)

[M P Ramesh]

welcome

MPR

[Harley Sapphire]

I loved the aesthetically pleasing vision this created in my head. I honestly had to read below to figure out what it signified, but I can see that with the contrasts. Thank you for the lovely read.

[Nirupama.H]

thank u :)

[matpat]

I love the imagery in this!

[Nirupama.H]

Thank you :)

[Emily]

Very creative!
Well done!!

[Nirupama.H]

Thank you :)

[Willard Wells]

I expect as others have said, there is something beyond the words here that are not know to me, But beautiful words that flow very nicely.

[Nirupama.H]

The contrast of a vibrant colour like orange against gray just feels nice to me. That's why i used them. It's stark brightness against stark dullness...like all the contrasts we see in life .

[Willard Wells]

Ok and thanks for your view.

[Nirupama.H]

Thank YOU :)