So Far Into Eve'

She was borne of destructive magic
A tempest in short skirt
A seductress unparalleled.
Silvery tongued
Lavishly apportioned.
A face that stops ships
She walks on gliding rails
And speaks with rising crescendo
and tantalizing trail offs.
Her heels are shimmering
diamonds, as she slides away
So far into eve'

Reviews

[The Iron Horseman]

You wish! :D Terrific portrait of a stunner, my friend. Love the imagery. It conjures her perfectly.

[Nipplegrinder]

Thank you, my friend. Much appreciated.

[The Iron Horseman]

You are very welcome.

[Corset]

This poem would even put Robert Palmer's girls to shame :3p that hot girl who walks off into the dark night heels glimmering, reflectively.

[Nipplegrinder]

Thank you, dear Corset. ;)

[Onlyme]

Oh my sounds like a cougar or a maneater. Nicely done. And quite a tale

[Nipplegrinder]

Thank you so much, Dawn! Perhaps, you're right!

[Delmar Cooper]

While I enjoyed the rich language of the poem I did not understand that lavish , perhaps lubricious language's references. This isn't a new condition for me, but I left with the impression you were telling me something I was deaf to, this made me uncomfortable with the poem.

[Nipplegrinder]

What can I say, Del? I'm not Rimbaud, for s**t sake! Haha
Thanks for stopping by, and always saying what you like, my friend.

[wordman]

sounds like a beautiful woman from the time of delilah,or cleopatra

[KWP]

I'd love to see you speak about your muse more metaphorically to help the reader slide right into Eve as you yourself have done. Although very strong, this one seems a bit blunt and in your face.

[Nipplegrinder]

Hmm. I will cop to some creative deficiencies. I certainly haven't been at my best, of late. Thanks, my friend.

[KWP]

being into BDSM its always good to get a slap to the chops every so often :D XXX