Ch.1

Merlin was laughing. The young, raven haired boy grinned at the sight of Gaius, his old uncle, sopping wet. Gaius glared at his nephew, irritated and cold. His left eye was slightly droopy, yet intensified his olive green gaze.

          "Merlin! Stop laughing, you idiot. It is NOT funny." The old man snapped, staggering slightly over to his bed. Merlin stopped laughing and helped his uncle get the sodden robe off his shoulders.

          "I`m sorry, Gaius. I shouldn`t have laughed." The boy said. His bright, blue/green eyes reflected his sadness. Gaius smiled, looking at Merlin fondly. I can never stay angry at Merlin for long. The old man thought. He shook his head softly, turning away and walking over to a cabinet that contained some of his potions.

          As for Merlin, he sighed. The boy started for the door, headed for Prince Arthur`s rooms. He was late already, and Arthur was stricter than usual. Slightly afraid, the servant quickened his pace and soon had run all the way to his master`s chambers. However, Merlin found himself thinking yet again about the beautiful Lady Morgana. She was a traitor, a poisonous snake hiding in Camelot, waiting to strike.

          Yet, Merlin enjoyed being around her. Selfishly, he admitted to himself that he had quite accidentally fallen in love. Why? Then, with a jolt of fear, he shook himself out of daydreams. Knocking tentatively on the imposing oak door that lead to Arthur`s rooms, Merlin held his breath.

          "Merlin? If that`s you, then come in!" Arthur`s harsh voice barked from inside. Gulping, Merlin pushed open the door. As he stepped in, he saw with a lurch of fear that Arthur was standing RIGHT in front of him. And, the crown prince was glaring. Eyes wide, the raven-haired serving boy started shaking violently.

          "Why, Merlin, have you been late again?" Arthur asked irritably, pacing closer to his frightened servant.

          "I had to help Gaius!" Merlin said, fearfully. He was backing away slightly as Arthur advanced. The Prince`s short, blond hair gleamed in the sunlight that streamed through the windows.

          "You had to help Gaius every day since August?" The prince demanded pointedly. Merlin shook his head, his blue/green eyes regretful. What will Arthur do now? The serving boy thought.

          Anger showed in Arthur`s face. He pointed firmly behind him and closed his eyes. "IN!" He hissed through gritted teeth. Merlin obeyed immediately. As soon as Arthur opened his eyes, he turned and saw his manservant getting to work. Surveying the room, Arthur decided to turn and leave.

          After a long time, Merlin heard the door open again. Looking up, he saw none other than beautiful Lady Morgana. As soon as she saw him, she stopped. Realizing that he was gaping, Merlin closed his mouth and shamefacedly returned to his work. Morgana looked at her former friend curiously.

          Why had he been staring at her like that? Then the realization hit her: He likes me. More interested now, she moved closer.

          "Do you know where Arthur is?" She asked. Merlin looked her in the eyes, gulped, and answered.

          "No...He just left." He answered quietly. Then, hesitantly, he returned yet again to washing the cold flagstone floor. Morgana cocked her head slightly, wondering. Hmm...I`ll have to tell my dear sister, Morgause. She thought. Ever so carefully, Morgana tested Merlin.

          "Do you want help?" Her eyes gleamed slightly with amusement.

          "No thank you, my Lady." Merlin said coolly, stressing the last bit slightly. Little did he see the sneer curling the Lady`s face. She nodded silently and turned, slipping out the door. As she strode away, she felt triumphant. Merlin would be a fly in her web if she could only just reel him in carefully...

Author's Note

review! What did you think?

Reviews

[Shellie]

Very good start. A really great opening chapter.

[tynamite]

I love it. Merlin is always told to stop laughing. This is really authentic.

[Elliara]

Wheeeeee, I love Merlin.

You did a good job in writing this. Just a couple of pointers.

1. Change in font....It takes it away, and I always think its a flashback. I wouldn't underline and italized the words, it takes away for the meaning.

2. Watch some of your grammar and punctuation.

3. I feel like I'm in the middle of a scene, and something happened before this chapter. Maybe a little more background?

good start. :)

[Amanda]

Beautiful start. I'm eager to see where you go with this. I love the story of Merlin

[Erin]

"review!" Fine! I will! lol
But I think that it's really good as a start. You have problems with commas and whether or not you know how to use them and keep a sentence well developed and fluent. One of the first few sentences of the entire book tripped me, and I got really confused. But I figured it out in time, but that’s not what you want. I think maybe it’s not a comma thing, but more of a voice and style thing, because I assume that you’re still in high school and you’re still developing your voice and style as an author, so you’ve gotta work on it. It’s something that comes in time when you write a lot and it’ll click and be your own voice. I’m not trying to say that this isn’t your own voice, but it’s more of the “awkward child voice” in which you write until you realize more writing styles and tricks to help you write better.
By the way, that was me ranting while trying to figure out how to help you.
But overall it’s great because you switched back and forth from Merlin to Morgana very well in this chapter. You’ll learn about colons and placement of colons later, so I won’t bore you with that, but your work seems to be more talent filled than potential filled. Nice job.
PBP

[nono]

I just love it. You know usual fan fiction ticks me off cause you know I think sometimes certain people should end up and some people shouldn't, but this is awesome! I love it and I can't wait to read the next chapter! XD

[Loriane]

I so freaking adore it! =)

[Drake Ryder]

Merlin is one of my favorite TV shows!
I like this story so far.

[Cassandra D.]

Oh my god!

I love watching merlin!

i shall continue reading this

[Daydreamer54]

hM, IT SEEMS TO HAVE AN INTRESTING START....
shamefacedly-you might want to change the word somehow.