thinking

This is the part where she starts thinking of what happened why it happened and a lot of other things.

     I walked down the street to my favorite pizza parlor Kid Zone. I didn't have any money on me so i just sat down in the booth in the way back, where it was quiet. I got to thinking what had happened?

     I was picking flowers, Lola was picking rocks and then a tornadoe came and sucked he up. That was pretty much it. Wait but what had happened 1 day earlier, did she do anything wrong?

    Lets see me and her were both doing a puzzle. Hers was a girl being sucked up by a tornadoe and mine was a picture of a girl walking the streets with a sad face. The puzzles! they are what caused this, but how?

     I left the pizza parlor feeling proud of what i had discovered, the only thing that didn't make sense was how could a puzzle have caused all this trouble? I was feeling pretty down in the dumps just sitting there on a park bench, then all of a sudden a pigeon came and sat right next to me. It had something in its mouth, a note? The note had my name written on it, the pigeon dropped it then flew away across the dark night sky.

If you wish to see your precious sister ever again you must return what rightfully belongs to me. the thing you stole three years ago. it was very precious to me just like your sister is to you. find, return it, and i will unhand your sister.

signed,

Demitrio

 

    

Author's Note

what do u think of the suspense try to predict what will happen next

Reviews

[Tina Kline]

That was very mysterious! The suspense is pretty good, made me want to
know what is going to happen next. Very interesting way you got there, connecting
what they had been doing to what happened. I Like that!

Mabye next you'll tell your readers what it was that Demitrio says they stole
that he wants back. Perhaps she knows or will have to try and figure that
out!

Great writing! Great mystery here!

[Hans von Lieven]

Still going strong I see. You are still doing well.

A couple of typos here:
Lola was picking rocks and then a tornadoe came and sucked he up.(tornado ...and...and sucked her up.)

Keep going, this is lovely.

Hans von Lieven