Disappear

This is where lola disappears into the tornadoe

     "These flowers are so pretty. I could just pick the whole batch!" Lily said

     "I don't think mom would be happy woth you if you did."Lola replied

     "I know i was just kidding..."

     "Oh my gosh look at how cool those rocks look."

     "Yeah cool." lily replied sarcasticaly

     "I'm gonna go pick some for my collection."

     "Okay be there in a sec."

      Then my sister left me to pick my flowers. Then the wind started to pick up, i couldn't see anything. Then  all of a sudden a tornadoe came outa no where.

     "AHHHHH!" i screamed

     "Lily help me!" My sister screamed but by the time i turned around she was already gone sucked up. Then everything stop the weather went back to normal but my sister was gone.

   

Author's Note

what do u think of the dialouge

Reviews

[Tina Kline]

Really excellent dialouge. For me reading it, it felt just like
to people out and about having a normal conversation.
It all seemed rather peaceful until the tornadoe comes up, sucks
up Lola and she's gone and the storm is too! Scary!
Very nice piece of writing here!