corncob queen

this is a story about a girl who dreams about becomin corncob queen but every year she loses to the same girl.

Ever since 9 year Olivia was 5 she had dreamed of becoming Tennessee’s own Corncob Queen. Every year she entered and every year she lost to Lizzy, the snobbiest girl ever to walk on the face of the earth, but this year she was determined to win.

       Olivia waited three hours in line to participate in the Corncob Queen pageant. 5 people in front of her stood Lizzy signing her name in fancy hand writing then placed the pen down and pranced away like a queen. When Olivia got to the front she signed her name in print then threw it down and walked away casually.

2 weeks before the pageant

       “I would like a hair appointment at 3:30 Saturday July 11” Olivia’s mom Ladon said hanging up the phone. Ladon had also made Olivia a makeover appointment at 2:30 that same day.

1 week before the pageant

Olivia walked from store to store with her sister Sami and her friend Emily looking for the right dress. “How about that pink one with the ruffles?” Emily said

“Or the baby blue one with spangles?” Sami said

“I don’t know…” Olivia said as they all turned around to see the perfect dress. “That one” they all called together. It was robin’s egg blue, spaghetti strapped, crossed in the back, and about four inches above the knee. There was one thing wrong with this dress, the price. It was a one of the kind candies and they were fifty dollars short. It was 500 and they had spent fifty on lunch, but luckily Sami and Emily had fifty dollars to spare. They know no one else will have the dress because it is one of a kind.

Day of pageant

       Olivia could not look prettier than she did today with her hair curled and the robins egg blue dress it was obvious that she would win Corncob Queen. When she got to the pageant everyone turned to look at who had become Tennessee’s new Corncob Queen.

 

Reviews

[Tina Kline]

I really liked the story and I enjoyed it up to the end but I got confused a bit. How did she becoming Corncob Queen. It sounded like she got there and everyone turned to see who the Corncob Queen was, it doesn't ay it was her. There was no part about her winning or how happy she was winning finally. I think your story will be a whole lot better if you change the ending to explain her finally, at last, winning the title and and how she felt, and how she felt about the other girl, finally, at last, losing to her!

[~Shadow Kissed~]

I agree with koufos. But it was still good:) and i live in tennesse :)

[H]

I like where this is going. But what happened? How did she become the Corncob Queen? How did she win? There isn't any conflict here, nor is there really a middle or end.