Just We Two

I want a large wooden house

Surrounded by a beautiful lake

Located near sharp mountains

Accompanied by nature's beauty,

Just for the two of us

I want to take her there

Make her laugh,make her smile

Make her forget, all the troubles 

She went through

I want to swim there

With her company

Watching the cold smile of sunset

Watching the warm tears of sunrise

From the window of that

Wooden house

I want to tell her stories

Of mine, of others, of those 

Who lived their lives

I want to comfort her, 

In sadness, in grief

I want to assure her that

She can rely on me in her beliefs

We will watch the seasons go by

We will watch how a little bird 

learns to fly

I want to kiss her cheeks

I want to feel her lips

I want that femininity

To trust my sincerity

Reviews

[Neville]

this reads to me like a song of longing .. there is clearly much emotion here and a yearning .. but I would say, depending on how old you are and & several other factors, avoid putting all your eggs in one basket until you have at least sampled a few omelettes ... Neville

[Nima.Hope]

You might be shocked sir but I'm a 40 year old soul in an 18 year old body I guess. Can you explain what exactly you mean by "sample a few omelttes" sir? I'll be glad to take a couple of advice.
Nima

[Neville]

I'm virtually unshockable my friend so no, I'm not surprised. Some folk might think you are very lucky, whilst others I guess may not .. it takes all sorts, doesn't it ..
You can't make an omelette without breaking a few eggs can you, and my advice to anyone who likes omelettes is to try as many as you can before deciding on a favourite .. and unless your life depends on it, try not to fall in love with the first omelette that comes along .. Good luck :)

[Nima.Hope]

I love omelette and I had one this morning as breakfast. Your advice was so delightful and wise. Thank you sir, you made my day.

[Neville]

you just made me smile .. and don't worry, your worth it .. my pleasure entirely :)

[William Michael Reeves]

You don't ask for much do you? Comfort and security. The time to watch seasons pass and lives grow. You could buy that house with the smiles that pile up like gold coins shining in the setting dawn, in the comfort of each other's arms as dusk rises. But be quick! The market is flooded with lover's wishing to buy the same dream. Real estate of the heart is at a premium.

[Nima.Hope]

I'm only 18 Bill, so for now, I guess no matter how much wealth I'm going to gain in the future, this dream will be my priority lol.
Heaven is briefed in that wooden house.....
Thank you dear Bill for this delightful review
My gratitude
Nima

[Betty Hermelee]

Whoever this "HER" is (maybe a daughter?) you certainly show love and respecr for her; and you are eager to perhaps re-new a relationship that wasn't there before...you create images of the surroundings (the wooden house) the I can f feel the closeness you have with this special person.
Nice write.
Best, Betty

[Nima.Hope]

Yes Betty, she is a very wise woman. I tried so hard to impress her for something beyond only a friend but I couldn't and I tried to keep things going as "just friends" but at the end, I found myself suffering, because it's very different to love a person in a romantic way than being being friends. Well, that's the story of mine. Thank you dearest Betty, I wish you the most beautiful things.
Nima

[Betty Hermelee]

It;s the bond that matters....
and you're very welcome
Best, B.

[Nima.Hope]

But sometimes the bond hurts.....

[Betty Hermelee]

yes it does, relationships are a pull and tug sometimes...

[Nima.Hope]

I agree. Relationships are complicated. Now I'm trying to have her back as my friend......

[Chris Shaw]

The her in this poem comes across as a very special lady. No wonder you want her in your days, There is a great deal of warmth being directed her way. A lovely poem Nima. Wishing the best for you always.

Chris

[Nima.Hope]

Yes, she is very special and I wish I deserve to have her by my side someday. "In my hour of darkness, she is standing there in front of me....."
Thank you dear Chris, I appreciate this review. I took wish the very best for you,
take care.
Nima