My fairy tale

The night I heard you, my dear

I chased you like a thirsty deer

I ran so fast to reach the lake

But I didn’t find you for god’s sake!

 

Where are you my one and only angel?

Why don't you sing to me

Like a miraculous nightingale?

 

Where are you, my ethereal fairy?

Do you even remember me

While writing your diary?

 

I searched everywhere to find you

Every myth and legend I saw

was a clue for me to seek you

 

I’ve smelled your perfume

Through the sweet sweat of Jasmine

To my diet of faith for eternity

You were essential like Vitamin

 

oh my muse of loyalty

Why do you keep yourself,

Hiding from me?

Why don't you open

A door of your hidden heaven

to show to this pilgrim

he has not been forgotten?

 

In the garden of dreams

I smell you like a flower

For I’ve been completely

dominated by your power

 

On this long night that might never end

I will seek for you in awareness

I will talk to you in dizziness

I’ll be caressing you in my sleep

 

Moon and stars are

Aware of my pain

They think of me as

A romantic insane

But I shall never stop praying

For nothing better than love

Can be gained

 

Oh the sun of kindness

Come out of the clouds for a second

For I’m greedy to see your bright face

Then you can abandon

 my  passionate waiting heart

Without being worried

 of any unwanted demand

 

I understand you're suffering

I know as time goes by

It becomes more bothering

Trust me in your feelings

Use my shelter of love

To avoid sadness in this world

As I gather safely

in Your temple of

celestial chords

 

Come to meet me

 at Eternity’s gate

Where there will be

many passionate mates

There, you'll see how my

masculinity will be waiting

for your genuine femininity

Author's Note

Miniature artworkd inpired by Maestro Mahmood Farshchiyan, Iranian painter.

Reviews

[William Michael Reeves]

The moon and stars watch us. They are aware. That was my favorite verse in this poem. Your poetry has a musky aroma. Thick with metaphor. Both sweet and passionate, yet overwhelming in anticipation. Is there a stick of insence available in this flavor? It could be said that faith is a vitamin. Good poem Nima

[Nima.Hope]

I learn many good words from you dear Bill, what lovely phrase is "musky aroma".
It has a personal story Bill, that's why it's anticipation and awaiting is overwhelming. It happens to almost every man once in a lifetime, to somehow beg for attention of a beloved girl. A true lover won't give up easily with only a few verses lol😂
Thank you sir. I must make up all your kindness, you'v reviewed many of my poems and I am grateful for it.
Wish you the very best✨🫡

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Beautiful poem
One of my favourite verses below here

“In the garden of dreams
I smell you like a flower
For I’ve been completely
dominated by your power “

Thanks for this wonderful poem
Beautiful

[Nima.Hope]

I'm glad you liked it dear Julie.
Thank you🤍

[Lisasview]

Good morning dearest Nima
I loved the thoughts that emerged from your delightful poem.
I have a thought about the structure.
I am thinking that if you reversed the second and third line and added punctuation your poem would read better.
The night I heard you my dear,
running so fast to reach the lake ...
I chased you like a thirsty deer,
But I didn’t find you, for god’s sake!

Sometimes moving things around a bit i find that my poems read more smoothly.
Hoping that I did not offend you..I just like to be honest when leaving a review.
These are just my thoughts...
Hugs, Lisa typing with one finger on my left hand

[Nima.Hope]

Thank you dear Lisa for your honest review, I'm always open to suggestions for edition. I'll keep your idea on the the new edition of the poem.
Hugs to you too🤍
Best wishes❤️

[Lisasview]

You are most welcome...

[Chris Shaw]

Your posted artwork is beautiful as are the lines in your romantic epic Nima. So wonderfully expressed dear poet. So warm in your conveying. I thoroughly enjoyed the read. How are you doing my fellow poet? I hope life is being kinder to you.

Chris

[Nima.Hope]

Hi dearest Chris, I hope everything is fine with you. You can find other masterpieces of Mahmood Farshchiyan in internet, he is the contemporary Kamal-al-din Behzad of Iran.
Thank you for calling it "epic" and I'm very honored to be called by a wise,mature and great poet as you, "fellow poet", my gratitude is beyond words.
Talking of life, it's been a series of hardship with commercial breaks of joy, so sometimes When I don't find any other way to get rid of the sadness, I write it down. It's ok,not bad,not awesome lol.
I send you hugs,love and best wishes
Nima

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you dear Nima. Take good care of yourself. Keep writing my friend. It’s good therapy. All good here. My very best to you .

[Aura]

This piece speaks of chasing love, but never quite grabbing ahold of it. The first stanza made me think of that and I love the comparison of the person chasing love like a thirsty deer chasing the water it desires. Thank you for sharing, I enjoyed reading!

[Nima.Hope]

Well, I think it's one of the most delightful poems I've ever written. It's all because of her, the woman I love. She makes me a good poet, although she never told me what she thought about this poem.
Thank you Aura.
Many good wishes for you:)

[Aura]

You are most welcome!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

suffering, bothering---nice rhyme there.
and the last two lines a perfect ending for this sprawling epic of a love poem written in fairy tale fashion.
j.

[Nima.Hope]

Thank you dear Jacob for your kind words, I really appreciate your review, you are the Maestro of the Cafe with no doubt.
All the best wishes

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Nima.hope... After reading your romantic poetry, I feel you may want to listen to a song available on U-tube, etc. entitled "Pretty Amazing Grace" written and performed by Neil Diamond. The Lyrics are very very "touching"" and by far my favorite. *** ( Correction: I also adore the Song "Jupiter in her Hair" by the Artist named "Train". He wrote it for His Mother, soon after She passed. Please find the Video where you see "Train" in person moving around the Stage with Instruments played by young performers as Backup. Very close to my Heart, since my Mother passed in 1978 at the age of 58. Blessings and Peace. Pat

[Nima.Hope]

Thank you very much for your amazing review. I didn't know there is another "Hallelujah" beside the one written by Leonard Cohen. I will check the songs you mentioned asap. I've heard about Neil Young, but I haven't listened to any of his songs sadly.
May God bless your mother, we all have memories by songs. For example my father's friend who died 3 years ago loved "You are always on my mind" very much and every time I listen to it I get emotional.
Wish you all the beautiful things and grace.
Nima

[Nima.Hope]

And thanks for putting this poem in your library,I really appreciate it dear Pat.🤗

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Nima.Hope... you will notice above that I corrected the name of the song by the Artist "Train" to :Jupiter in her Hair. I must be more careful. The words written by "Train" are very beautiful.. gently, Pat p.s. There is only one special song written by Neil Diamond entitled Pretty Amazing Grace". Sorry for the confusion.

[Nima.Hope]

Call me Nima dear Pat, it's alright and thank you for your caring and kindness.
Wish you all the very best wishes
Nima

[Soren]

The more we chase the more the prey runs. Like chasing a shadow you can never catch it but it is always close by. The illusive is alway the most attractive. Nicely written.

[Nima.Hope]

I wish our imaginings could become true and all we wanted wasn't an illusive symbol.
Thank you dear Soren.
All the very best wishes for you
Nima

[W. Barrett Munn]

I truly enjoyed how skillfully and thoroughly you embraced near rhymes in this almost flawless piece. Nice job.

Winston

[Nima.Hope]

Thank you very much dear Winston. Recently almost no one reviews my romantic poems, I was becoming worried lol.