The jealous piano

I saw you last night

you were shining in my dream

I was  wearing a black suit and having a black tie

While you were the lady in red

I caressed your hair

Without any care

I became careless when I saw you

As I was an amateur pianist showing his passion

Who was playing Chopin to you

You stood beside the piano

The black box of music

I didn’t say anything

The piano sang instead

As the gramophone played Dean Martin

I kissed you and felt the softness of your lips

Compared to a soft satin

Then I took you with me

To a quiet place for you and me

I sang you the poems of passion

I was like a lover in an old fashion

The two of us cuddled in the night

Waiting for the morning sun to bright

And the grand piano smiled at us

I saw him jealous of both of us

 

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the personification of the piano and the jealousy of an inanimate object is quite well used here.
I really like "like a lover in an old fahsion"
my parents used to drink those...but the double meaning works here as well.
Line 18 I read as "quiet"....

nicely done
j.

[Nima.Hope]

Thanks Jacob for your lovely comment. You are right. I wanted to write "quiet" but instead I wrote "quite".
The pleasure is mine.Best Wishes

[Bliss in Sorrow]

Very interesting personification of piano and a beautiful portrayal of romance. I really enjoyed reading this :)

[Nima.Hope]

Thank you Bliss. Hope you enjoy my other poems too!

[John the Baptist]

Comes across as the replication of a dream. The speaker is telling the addressee of a semi-erotic encounter between the two of them. It leaves us on a happy note. Not a lot of poems do.

[Nima.Hope]

Thanks John for your very kind review, it is much appreciated.
Regards
Nima

[Stella Armour]

Lovely , so romantic and i liked the personification of the piano very much ...

[Nima.Hope]

Thanks Stella. A man playing Chopin on a grand piano, is always a symbol of a romantic guy, like the man in "The Pianist", am I wrong?

[Stella Armour]

You are not wrong, the pianist has sensitive hands ....

[Temperance]

Nice dream quality write. Interesting using the piano as the jealous one. Nicely done. Temp

[Nima.Hope]

Thanks temp. Wish you the best.

[Temperance]

And you as well!

[lightsong]

a dream-like poem. You are romantic, and though the reader will see this as a sweet romantic poem but as I was reading it, I also got to feel the spiritual part of You. Wonderful one my friend.

[Nima.Hope]

Thanks dear for your kind words. I really appreciate this review. It seems I am both a Persian and a Roman! Interesting paradox.
Best Wishes

[Soren]

This piece read so smoothly I felt that I was drinking an old fashion. I enjoyed the mixture of the inanimate with the person in its personification. Being a music lover the theme of music and love came right through. Very well done.

[Nima.Hope]

Thanks Soren. I always want to write poems that are easy to understand and don't have a confusing vocabulary.
I always admire the romantic styles of the 19th century and the first half of 20th century.

[Davidgeo]

I love this. I love how you write.

It's like a dance. You're very, very good. English is not your first language I take it? Which makes this all the more impressive but not surprising at all if that makes any sense.

[Nima.Hope]

It's so kind of you to say that. No, actually my first language is not English but Persian(a lovely language to learn).
I'm just an amateur poet but I'm more skillful in writing stories and essays.
The pleasure is mine, thanks David.
Best Wishes
Nima

[Davidgeo]

You really do have a kind of romance to how you communicate. I speak a little arabic and i've heard that is similar to persian. My love for your writing makes more sense now. I've heard a lot of mesopotamian arabic being spoken in situ and it can be a really beautiful language, There's more passion in it than the western languages, for better or worse.

[Nima.Hope]

Thanks. Persians are completely different from Arabs, although there is a little similarity between them from the apperance(I do not mean dressing style) to a considerable words that are used in both languages. Persia has one of the oldest cultures in the world(more than 7 thousand years of Monarchy) but Arabs weren't united till the appearance of Islam in Arabia. Arabic culture is very limited and small comparing to Persian culture. Most of the things that are added to the Islamic culture has came from the Sassanid Dynasty of Persia. I suggest you to read more about Persia or Iran or Achamenid dynasty on Wikipedia to learn more about differences.
P.S: Never think that if you speak Arabic, Persians will understand you.
I suggest you to instead of focusing on Arabic, focus on Persian. Because when you learn Persian, a library of more than 1 million poems will be opened to you.
Best Regards

[Davidgeo]

I've only learned other languages out of utility. It's good to get a more nuanced perspective. I appreciate that.

[Davidgeo]

If you ever want that kind of take on midwestern american dialect let me know

[Nima.Hope]

I'm not underestimating Arabic. Just I want people to not think that Persian and Arabic are the same. The same is happening for Iran. Many people think Iran is like Iraq and the people are the same.
P.S: You should know the grammar of Arabic was established by Persians after Islam.

[Davidgeo]

People who know anything know they aren't the same, don't fret. You speak from a more passionate standpoint, I only come from a utilitarian standpoint. I do appreciate the detailed stance you have but please understand, these are all just sounds related to describing subjects to me. For better or worse, I'm pretty sterile when it comes to what you're talking about.

[Nima.Hope]

Good point mentioned. Thanks

[Chris Shaw]

Personifying the piano, I like that idea. A pleasant romantic write. Love was certainly in the air.

Chris

[Nima.Hope]

Piano is something that cannot be replaced by any other instrument. I think he(piano) is a gentleman!
Thanks Chris
Regards
Nima

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Love this
I love poems where the objects show feelings
Good one here enjoyed it
Great descriptives and I can picture it in my minds eye the piano breathing heavily sighing and crying almost

[Nima.Hope]

You know, sometimes I become jealous of people who lived in the 19th century. Because they were surrounded by many fancy and classical things and that time, everything was stylish, from the way people dressed up to the style of romance they had.
Thanks for your comment Julie. It's my pleasure that you commented on this poem.
Best Wishes
Nima

[Robert Haigh]

The title reminds me of some of Magritte's surrealist paintings. The kind of title he'd be likely to come up with. Your poem does have a surrealistic element to it. Quite a pleasant read.

[Nima.Hope]

Thanks for your complete comment Robert. Actually, I'm not as professional as you are about the schools of art. My pleasure.
Regards
Nima