The Listener Of Lies

Not understanding the true power of words

Whispers are the listeners of lies
Woven into an elaborate web with a million ties
Desperation for a certain desire
Make us join into
This tasteful disaster
So they hand us the shimmering web
And we begin to unravel and spread
Not questioning if this is the true everlasting silk
Or lying cheap cotton that will begin to wilt
But why question?
When the gift that is given
Is so succulent- like wine
And it feeds that fire-
Your desperate desire
The true harm of the words
Are glazed with that shimmering coating
While the web is truly the cotton wilting
It pretends to be everlasting
So you remain unaware of the poison you are telling

Author's Note

Oh I really hope this turns into something brilliant. Questions? Comments? Hate it? Feedback of any sorts is always welcome with me!

P.S.- Anyone want/need an editor? I need to start practicing for my dream job.

Reviews

[Krystal]

I really enjoyed reading this ;) I love the way you went from a web to cotton. It was great. I don't know about anyone else but, I know I probably never would have thought of that. Fantastic, this is good stuff.

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Whispers are the listeners of lies
Woven into an elaborate web with a million ties
I love it 100/100
And if you really need someone to edit their stories,chapters or poems. I would be glad if u could be mine. I'm only 11 and I can make many mistakes.

[Aurora .I.]

*Eye Sparkle* You mean it?! Could I really?!Yay! Squeal Squeal Squeal! :3 Thank you very very much! For the review and for the opportunity you have just given me! :D That has to be one of my favorite lines out of all the poems I've ever written. I wonder if I should make this poem longer or keep it short? Which do you think?

[.]

If you want to make it longer, i would love that, just follow your heart

[Aurora .I.]

Okay now the question is- Which you enjoy the most?

[.]

the longest

[Aurora .I.]

Yay! I didn't ruin it! XD Thank you very much! Sorry for being a bother :/

[.]

It's ok

[Rhianne Ney]

Words can hurt like a dagger and lies will scar a heart deeper... This is a good poem and your words are deep...Nice write *friendly smile*
How old are you? just asking (:

[Rhianne Ney]

uh.. sorry no need to tell me your age I found it on the bio...

[Aurora .I.]

XD Thank you very much my dear. Yes it is very, very true. In my opinion words are worse then cuts. Cuts heal up but words stay in your heart with both evil or kind intent. I kind of want to make it longer but at the same time I like it short. What do you think?

[Rhianne Ney]

I agree (:

[Aurora .I.]

Keeping it short it is! XD

[Aurora .I.]

Could you check the long version? See if you like it? I'm sorry to keep pestering you.

[Rhianne Ney]

The long one is good... it's also okay if you use the power of simple words... But it's great all along *thumbs-up*