A Monster

I found this poem when I was cleaning out my room a while ago, I thought it was interesting and I can't wait to find out what everyone thinks of it

 

I thought I knew you

I trusted you

I loved you

but you lied to me

You hurt me

 

I tried to forget you

But I couldn't

All I remember was the good times

I knew you were a monster

but I couldn't leave

 

How can I continue?

When I feel all of this?

Lonely

Sad

Why did you do that to me

 

People warned me about you

They told me not to trust you

That you were a monster

and I didn't listen

 

And now when you hurt me

I feel alone

I am cold

I am crying

Why do this to me?

 

Now I understand

Now I know what they were trying to tell me

You are a monster

It was you who hurt me

 

I will heal 

I will love again

and I will live

For I will not allow you to control me

 

I know that I loved you

I used to but no longer

Now I closed that door that leads to you

That door will never be reopened

 

I will heal

I will love

I will live

Now that I know

You are the monster

Not me

 

 

Author's Note

Please tell me what you think of this

Reviews

[Damian Alan Gray]

The gist of this poem is intoned in such a way as to make no mistake about the implications of codependency. It is well written free-verse, but I might make the following suggestion:

In the stanza:
"I will heal
I will love again
and I will live
For I will not allow you to control me"

You may wish to consider revising it to read as you did with the final stanza, thus:

"I will heal
I will love
I will live
I will not
Allow you to control me."

The reason behind this is because the repetition of the wording can drive the point home to the reader. Aside from all that, great poem!

[The_impure_goddess]

OMG!!!! I love this poem, you really have a talent for poetry and you really capture your readers. Good job, I can't wait to read more of your amazing writing.

[Face In A Crowd]

That's really good. Amazing.