Anyone?

something i did when i was bored , reviews would be nice?

The girl in the mirror

Is crying tonight

And nothing on earth

Will make her alright

What happened to the place

She thought was kind?

Now alone with her thoughts 

And she's lost her mind

Longing for love

All she feels is hate

As i try to soothe her

But its already too late

The tears on her cheeks

The note in her hand

A cry for affection

One final demand

But nobody came

So nobody cared

So i wached in the mirror

As I just hung there.

 

 

Author's Note

ignore grammar problems please.

Reviews

[Jane Doe]

wow!


I LOVVVE IT ITS AWSOME I MEAN IT WAS LIKE BAM ! THEN IT WAS ALL SAD AND THEN IT WAS ALL LOVEY DOVEY AND THEN IT WAS SAD AGAIN

but i loved it u almost described me except no one cares about me so no one i am sure no one would try to soothe me :(
but i lovvedddd it thx for the great read really its awsome
LUV YA
:)

[Andrew'sWonderland]

A surprise ending is always nice, but it is hard to perfect as you have!!! I love the expression and emotion in this piece!! Great Write!!

[Jessica]

WOW this was really good i'm going to add it to my reading list! the ending was suprising and everything was just very well written and expressed beautifully!

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

wow....... I really like this poem...... "'So I watched in the mirror As I just hung there"...... i like it very much

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Wow, what can I say...this is truly a good piece. The ending surprises me, which gives it a nice touch. Good flow and word usage. Good job.

[MiMi Malice]

I am in love with this poem its a love hate thing I love it in every way then I hate it cause I wasn't the one to come up with something so brilliant!..Needless to say I think it's very good!