Butterflies

Butterflies

A Poem by Nicole_the_poet
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Sooo old Now

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I caught you
You caught me
I loved you
But you hurted me
Now your seeking for me again
But butterflies i feel
Every time
But butterflies
Is old now
So please leave me alone
Thank you
~ Nicolethepoet

© 2024 Nicole_the_poet


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Nicole_the_poet
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Aside from a few grammatical hiccups ("Hurted" gave me a bit of a chuckle), there's a lot to say in this poem. I think we've all been caught up in unhealthy exchanges of affection. But the feeling of butterflies only goes so far when you're dealing with someone that hurts you time and time again. Also, at the end of the poem, perhaps there could have been another line used. Something along the lines of,

"So please leave me alone
Don't bother to call my phone"

These are just suggestions though. I feel it's important for a writer to pen their works from their hearts, which was clearly done in this poem. Thank you for sharing your work!

Posted 3 Months Ago


way to go for your speaker .. we take a romantic "one" back too often and more to our hurt .. i like the spunk and reality check of your poem Ms. Nicole .. straight to the gate and honest to the bone .. thank you so much for sharing a part of your soul .. love on ya! peace and joy!
E.

Posted 3 Months Ago



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Added on August 16, 2024
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Nicole_the_poet

Detroit, MI



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