The Birds, The Flight

Following the time, 

I wonder if I'll ever

Fly into the big 

Blue sky with wings and swirl like

There's no keeping time of life. 

Author's Note

A senryu (5-7-5-7-7).

I was looking for haikus, but instead found an old senryu poem of mine, A Truth Untold. That was my late night inspiration.

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Reviews

[Adam Adams]

Beautiful words you chose to write 'pon. I find a little taste of freedom in your poetic art. Sometimes, it's hard to understand what a life's 'bout, but when it comes to words, yes.. the heart speaks well to spirit to express how even the life brings things alive in life with freedom. Time never stops for anyone.. nobody stops for anyone so.. we much move on along winds to find anew freedom .. anew love to leave what's not even ours. Nice imagery you've come up with. Keep writing!

[JENY]

This is a piece of thought is from the philosophical moments of your life….
Liked it…

[Mauricio Montoya]

For some reason I can identify with birds therefore I totally can relate this piece on a spiritually level. Excellent write.

[Starr]

Good write, there is so much freedom in the line "There's no keeping time of life." I have to point out though that this is actually a Tanka poem. (5-7-5-7-7) a poem structure and discipline related to the Haiku. A Senryu has the same syllable count as a Haiku (5-7-5). The difference between the two is that Haiku reflects the 4 seasons or nature. And the Senryu deals with emotions or human nature. Keep 'em coming poet, you really did a good job. :~)