Learning, Caring, Feeling, Thinking.

Slapping me in the face,
Realization told me something new,

Something different from ever before.

It whispered into my ear that I cared,

That it was painful to stare at

The words that stood in the front of me,

And that I had to think, learn, and feel

For the very first time in a long time.

 

So I’m sorry for the muteness,
I’m sorry for not saying how

I really felt about those words.
Realization had just opened my eyes

After that, so I didn’t know what to do

Or what to say say at that time…

So let these untold moments let you see how

I felt, and what I had learned from this experience.  

Thank you for teaching me the lesson in

Learning, Caring, Feeling, and Thinking.

It showed me a lot about myself, and my expectations.

 

Author's Note

This guy I was slightly (somewhat) dating told me a while back in February that he missed his ex to me. I usually didn't mind at first when he brought her up once in a while,but when he told me that, it was weird. Like, I felt like the words were like a fist in my face. So this is for him since I was too scared to tell him how I felt about what he had said to me. But yeah. I'm just hoping that fate will bring us onto another path, and that we can be friends. ^ ^

I'm not sure if I like the ending stanza. I'm not sure if I should have it there or not.

Reviews

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Congrats on your great winning poem!

[Just Plain Me]

I read it...read your description/author's note (Thing is just a better word. haha) and then reread the poem...and I still can't come up with a better word to describe it than "wow." This is just...wow. Great Job, I'm glad you submitted it to my contest.

[Sagela]

I know how you feel in that situation and the ending stanza should still be there. It gives a sense of realization and a bittersweet feeling to it. It is a wonderful piece of work. Beautiful job.

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Yes, I definitely agree about how much your explanation helps the poem. :] Context is such an important aspect to poems, a lot of the time.

"It whispered into my ear that I cared,"

[An owl on the moon]

You capture so well the joys and pains of relationships, living and learning and feeling... Beautifully bittersweet...

[Jinx's Heart]

You explanation of your poem takes it deeper than I originally interpreted it. I love it! You are so strong and talented. If I were in the same situation, I would have been caught off guard as well. A very well written piece!