Everybody's Fool

 

I wish that I didn’t have to dream

About the soft kisses on my lips

Or the comforting hugs that are

Wrapped around my waist;

My mind wanders off

Into another world

When I dream

About you

And those

Blue eyes

Of yours.

Author's Note

I feel that this poem is kind of cheesy in a way and that I should MAYBE add more, yet I think it makes sense to me....I made the line breaks get smaller and smaller as I started to end this poem. I don't know..what do you think? Oh, what about the title? Does that make sense too? I'm just wondering.

Credit: Banana Pancakes by Jack Johnson gave me the idea for this poem. : ]

Reviews

[Christopher 'Windstorm'..]

nah i didn't see cheesy, it is a vortex sucking you in making you wonder who you are talking about and then with just a hint we get blue eyes. well done

[Blade & Blood (The ..]

Oh yeah, the title is great. It fits perfectly with the poem because when a person is in love, they go a little... insane... or perhaps they fall into a spell that they can't get out of. And if this poem makes sense to you the way it is, then you don't need to add to it. If it makes sense to you, it should make sense to us. ;)

As I read this short poem, my own mind gets caught into this. It seriously is a great piece for those who know the feeling, so excellent job!

Ironically Yours, Blade and Blood

[Pinky]

I like it... i saw the line breaks and think it worked! Yea maybe a bit cheesy but cheesy can be good!!! Its a sweet piece... i too have been trapped by blue eyes!