The Truth Bit Me, and Then It Ripped My Heart Out

Venting poem

Gut kicked and blind,

I stare up at you 
And I wonder why?

I'm not a mindless idiot

That will bow down to

The tasks that you

Have given to me,

Since you must really think

That I am carpet

To be walked upon on,

Being trampled on by

Almost everybody else

I run into in my life.

I've realized the past, 
The things I didn't see

For being stung by my own kindness.

So don't you DARE THINK

That you can do the same!

I am not a zombie, nor am I stupid.
I am only me.

Author's Note

When I was talking to my mom in the car going home from school, she told me about what my friend had done (you'd have to send me a message to ask what it's about) and I felt like I had been used when she said that. Then after while, I started thinking that I've been used a lot during my life (just with simple things ).

Reviews

[Adela Muresan]

Kowel, way of expressing revolt against being mistreated.

A.M.

[Des]

I very much like this. Emotion-filled and blunt. It sucks to be used, simple or not.

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

nice piece, i loved the picture to go along with it.


Nicely done,
Thanks for submitting.

[Steffi]

I liked this one.
The only thing i can say about it though is that the flow is a little off. It reads a little choppy throughout the whole thing. Maybe make some line longer. When the whole thing is that awkward choppy sentencing its hard to really get the emotions and feeling of the piece.

[Casablanca]

Nobody should be the carpet for anyone else. I don't like the thought of you or anybody being walked upon. If someone walks on you would you please call me. I'll knock them backwards I guarantee that.

Well, I shouldn't say such things on a review. Next time I won't. But your poem gets a perfect grade from me.

[smiggle wiggle]

Sorry you got used. :( I know how it feels. Great poem though!

[Kara Emily Krantz]

being used... man, i know what you're feeling. this was a nice little rant.

i adored the title by the way - you could definitely do something more with a title like that. :)

nice to meet you