Lady of the Night

For Creative Writing.

The full moon glows,

Shimmering into the night,

As a monstrous form comes

Out of the depths

Of the eye of the water.

At first, it shivers, but

Then it sheds off its coat,

Turning into a woman

With a beautiful smile and hypnotizing eyes,

Her silk flown hair touching

The face of the ground.

 

A small gust of wind makes her shake

For just a moment,

Standing stiffly as though she was

Turned to stone.

Taking small steps with little caution,

She dips down and runs her slender

Fingers down to feel its sorrow,

Seeing a face of a young man from

So many years ago,
Reminiscing about the love that

She had within her soul.

 

Clutching her hand into her fist,

The woman sank down to her knees and cried,

Knowning that in her heart,

She would never see him again,

Only being the Lady of the Night

To the moon and the stars,

Being a mistress inside his dreams.

Reviews

[Not Afraid of Bruises]

nice poem. You submitted it to a contest of mine, but sadly it was over the 100 word limit. Still, I really enjoyed it, you had some strong images. Just watch out for the flow. There were a few choppy places, though I guess it depends on how yo read it. thanks for sharing

[Tina Kline]

Very beautiful and tragic at the same time.

[ganymeder]

Very tragic and mythological feel to it. I like the imagery. Very nicely written. :)

[Albert Freeman]

A bit of a sad poem. Is this her curse to repeat this for eternity lamenting her lost love? Very nicely descriptive read.

[Sarah]

Interesting poem. I loved the description & how this seemed to be only part of a tale, leaving a lot up to the imagination. I think that's a very important aspect of poetry - it can't be too blunt, but instead leave some work to the reader. =) Great job!

[Emily B]

Oh, this is lovely. It has such a mythological feel to it. Nice write.

[Casablanca]

You capture classic romance in your poem. Heartfelt desires that need words to bring them permanence. You have granted them a wonderful term in your verse.

Sorrow finds such expression within each line.

[Brandon Meyers]

Very nice. I got an excellent visual of a breaking water surface. Not trying to nitpick, so I'm going to assume that the use of "women" rather than 'woman' was intentional in both cases. Nice write!