To Kill You In A Day

Horrible breakup.

"Its over" you once said.

So very easy, I thought in my head.

So very easy, to kill you in bed.

So very easy, to make you dead.

So very easy, to cut you in the head,

if you get what I say.

 

"I follow you today, you and your new fiance'.

I plan to kill you some day.

And that day is next  Sunday.

Three days from now, I'll kill you in bed.

Sweet, oh so sweet Sunday. Come soon.

"Will you allow me to see you today?"

You say, I'll see you at five.

Today you will die, in the bed at five.

 

You walk through the door all high and mighty.

I take one look at you, and your eyes are dry, you look like you'll cry.

"I don't know what to do, what to say" you cry.

I follow you to the couch, my confusion allowing me to stray.

"She tortures me, she hates me, she makes me realize how much I miss you."

You look at me with those puppy dog eyes.

 

"You fool" I say.

My lips astray, and parted at my dismay.

Your lips cover mine, your hands tug my skirt.

Wrapping me legs around you, we head upstairs.

You lay me on the bed, and I thought to myself.

Maybe today is not the day.

You will not die today.

Author's Note

Tried to make it rhymn.
But I think I made it akward.

Reviews

[Jessica]

this is probably my favorite poem that you've written (besides the sex one, of course). maybe because of what just happened in my life, but i love it. how someone can be so set on revenge and letting go, but at the last moment, always changing their mind and going back to that person..i've been there D:
and i loved the rhyming

[Red]

I have to be truthful,. the name is what caught my eye. while reading I liked how it flowed so wonderfully. I also enjoyed the end how everything just changes some how, as if it never happened. You said that you thought you made it "sound weird", but It sounds fine to me. I thought at the end she was going to kill him anyway and just say "f**k it, I'm not coming back to you." Anyhow, nice work and I look forward to reading more of your poems, story's, and whatnot

[tamilynnyea;.]

Lol! I love it.
&It's not so awkward, just f*****g awesome. ^_^

[Elanra]

wow... thats kinky!! arrogant and sassy but all in a good way!! i liked the way you wrote this, its the first time i ever read a poem like this but i really liked it.

Good job!

[LilyWriter]

I like this poem a lot! How many times does this happen? It is frustrating! I love the rage expressed in this poem. The word flow is great and really carried you though to the end. Very good job!

[Aranee]

You know. I bet the guy was just trying to do anything to prevent himself from getting killed.
But anyways. I think the story within the poem is hilarious.
Almost ironic in a way I guess?
I think you've done a very good job with this poem :D
I like the line, "You look at me with those puppy dog eyes"
It makes you wonder how he looked like, at this point.
You know, the angelic look that will sway anybody off their feet!

[L]

Sometimes rhyme is not as important as the flow.
This flowed well and set a wonderful stage to show life and strife
decisions made and broken for love or lust. A good and enjoyable
read. Haven't we all been there.

~L~

[Rima]

Great job
I like it
The rhyming didn't make it awkward, it helped the poem flow and read better

[*~Kristy~*]

Wow...THIS WAS AMAZING TO THE MAX!!!