Screwed

You said you loved me

Is this true?

I can't help the way 

I feel about you!

When you shine

your on my mind

your so devine

Please be mine?

But when your mean

I want to scream!

I fall apart

I have bad dreams

You drive me crazy!!!

your f****n lazy

Your mind is gone

I write sad songs

All i can do

Is sit and pray

everyday

until i die

It makes me cry

I wonder why?

The world is screwed

and you are to

Reviews

[Ees]

"your on my mind
your so devine"
your= you're
and in every use of that word in this poem.
to in last line should be too.

I realize that you might not give a s**t that those words were not used correctly, but to me as a reader, I found them very distracting and you might want to consider fixing them, as they do not do justice to the poem that you wrote.

and the poem itself: fantastic! The flow is easy and the theme relatable! I can feel it, hell I have felt it! I think you did a great job. There is a lot of truth and reality in this poem.

[Invisible]

only a man could evoke such raw emotions from a woman.

[B-poet]

Cutting ties with what is longer good for you is the best way to go everytime. Great poem. I love how you've conveyed a true genuine angst as it relates to what has screwed a lot of people over in this life. :)

[Eagle Cruagh]

Screw the cap back on
and save it.
This is a gem.
---- John

[Wolfwind]

It's always good to write it all out. Life can be a blender of the emotions at times and the best recourse can often be just add some fruit to it, a scoop of ice cream and then drink it on down, learning from what life had tossed our way.

Aaron