a young adult...mature beyond his age reflecting on the state we are in!!
I have seen people
that got old lonely
I have seen selling
in front of schools
I have seen life,
a life that starts
thrown in a sack as if
it were household junk.
I have seen the air that
became red-hot of lead,
and thirsty land in too
many parts of the world.
I'm not very old
I haven't existed for all that long,
but I swear that I've
seen those things already.
I just ask people
to be more real
people from everywhere
of every age,
ideology or nationality
I just ask something to
be done collectively so
that the things I've
seen could stop much sooner.
I have seen the sky
that became heavy
covered by a shadow
of a huge cloud,
I have seen the infected water
than nobody can drink
I wish I'd never seen
all those things.
I just hope that
decision makers
those that command
know what they are doing,
and if they have the courage
to at least respond to us,
I just hope that
future youth will
never see, not even
on television, the
things I have painfully seen.
I'm wondering what to do
to strive, certainly we must battle
our demons and try to talk openly
and honestly........
to put an end to all this horror,
I'm wondering whether
love by itself could suffice.....
if only we could all love one another,
it would be a start, a hopeful sign of progress.....
to try and wash away from my mind, my eyes,
the things that I have seen......
this is political, a vision through the eyes of a young but very mature adult!!
Although I don't live in the U.S., I support Obama......say yes to change....it's the only way to put an end to all your pains and tears....yes....you can make a difference....have faith in Obama!!!
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I like the message behind the poetry as well and it was brilliantly done.
"I'm wondering what to do
to strive, certainly we must battle
our demons and try to talk openly
and honestly........
to put an end to all this horror,
I'm wondering whether
love by itself could suffice.....
if only we could all love one another,
it would be a start, a hopeful sign of progress.....
to try and wash away from my mind, my eyes,
the things that I have seen......"
A very hopeful message and one not far from being almost too late. although we should all still strive for change, I sometimes wonder if its not too late. I pray it isn't, I fear it is. well written and very in the now.
I have to agree with Phillip Oyok in that the poem somehow reminds me of the Stones' Sympathy for the Devil. But from the start it is also very reminiscent of Ginsberg's Howl because it is a questioning of generational values (Howl excerpt: "I saw the best minds of my generation destroyed by madness"). Nicely written. I would, however, omit the pause marks in the final stanza. They really aren't needed to impact the statement.
I like the message behind the poetry as well and it was brilliantly done.
"I'm wondering what to do
to strive, certainly we must battle
our demons and try to talk openly
and honestly........
to put an end to all this horror,
I'm wondering whether
love by itself could suffice.....
if only we could all love one another,
it would be a start, a hopeful sign of progress.....
to try and wash away from my mind, my eyes,
the things that I have seen......"
thats so strong writing ,yes there are so much wrongs in this world ,its all in the hands who dominate ,alas in the wrong hands ,who will save us ,who will cry for us ,i think we need a great shock to this world to come back to its senses,very nice writing
Interesting. I like the tone the narrator takes, no anger so much as weariness. I felt like the flow was a little lost in the body of the work however, you brought things back nicely at the end.
A very daring poem you have here, my friend. For some reason, it reminds me so much of that classic Rolling Stones song 'Sympathy for the Devil'. The narrator in your poem has certainly seen a lot of things, and the style you use in exploring the world through his eyes makes him such a facinating character study.
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