Letter to the Future (Part 2 - The Son - The Ultimate Revolution)

the evil winds seem to have died down...but have they?....has anything really changed?......the new born prince is growing up and speaks of what he sees and feels.....time passes but that's about the only thing that changes.....it's a new time.....many ye

 

before one should try
to heal the world
it might be better
to understand each other first
before one should start
scraping the bottom
let's first come up
with a gesture, my friend

 

the prejudices and the idiocy
as always still show up, a little further
there is a general
attack of myopia that
could become blind.

 

I'll be wrong but look around,
look what's there
that's why I've barricaded
myself in this cage,  because there's too much
confusion and too many people
that always pretend to know everything,

even though the blasts of horror before their very eyes

has left our castle crying deep beneath the burned remains

of our once protected walls of serenity and safety,

the metal beams are all that remain.

 

For everyone there's a story
that doesn't work out
and if everybody is right
who's ever gonna be the guilty one?

Yep...blame it on that evil wind,

it's the easy way out.

 

it's already a start
when you are here
and to know to whom
you can talk,

fortunately you are someone
who can also listen - hear my cries

of pain and desperation....stop for a "single moment".....

Don't be afraid of my hand.

 

"The ultimate revolution"

 

if you're still the friend
you've always been
what do you think then
about trying to grab hold of my crippled hand

and to try and become
"better friends"

 

before one should try
to heal the world
it might be better to
understand each other first
before one should try to
measure the world
it might be better to
change ourselves first,

hands held tight we move forward

to face the fire and evil winds

set before us.

 

it might be the ultimate
revolution that everyone
should live inside oneself,

My hand is there, to try and change all that,

I too am in need

of finding my way out of

"this cage I live in".

 

The ultimate revolution lies ahead of us.........








 

Author's Note

the evil winds seem to have died down...but have they?....has anything really changed?......the new born prince is growing up and speaks of what he sees and feels.....time passes but that's about the only thing that changes.....it's a new time.....many years have gone by.....and still the evil wind in some of us never dies....the names change but the mistakes which we create ourselves keep repeating......despite our cries for change, for harmony, for peace!!!!......working on Part 3 to be released in the near future!!

Reviews

[Catrinka]

Well written piece - improvement in our world needs to start with self-improvement. What your writing says to me is let's try to understand and accept each other's differences rather than to change the world to our own narrow vision of what is right. Nice job here - KUDOS! I especially liked the last stanza - well done!

[TamerQtaish]

Crying for peace wont do much, peace needs actions, needs people opening their eyes and seeing through the clouds of anger and hate bro...
None the less a beautiful work you have displayed here

All the best,
Tamer

[Brenda Sue]

Very well written. Thanks for sharing. Wonderfully penned.

[Travis Lawrence]

Interesting, I like the imagery of the desolate land contrasted with two people bravely facing the world. And I really like the first lines:

"before one should try
to heal the world
it might be better
to understand each other first"

This is so true, because how would we know how to heal if we don't know what hurts? Communication is the first step, great message.

Some language or lines seem out of place, because at first I get an elevated feel, and some kind of ancient voice speaking the story within the poem, and then it drops off. For example...

"For everyone there's a story
that doesn't work out
and if everybody is right
who's ever gonna be the guilty one?
Yep...blame it on that evil wind,
it's the easy way out."

I see what you are saying, but I think this would work better with some higher diction, without "gonna" or "yep". But really there isn't much of that anywhere else.

I'm looking forward to reading part three.

-Travis

[Chad Wesley Allbrett]

I know what you mean, I used to want to change the world now I just believe that I can only really change myself, and thus in a small way change the world.

[Bear]

one of these days... I hope that all start walking in the same direction.... holding hands, supporting one another along the way... marching together in hopes of starting life as one, together; making changes, accepting one another for one's strengths and weaknesses and learning from each and marching onward, upward, together for the cause of life.

[Carrie]

GOOD JOB! Thanks, for sharing. Ttys. God Bless. HUGS!

[Patsy]

That is so good... I share your point of view on this one... funny how I blogged about this at times somewhere else... Thanks Nico

[SM Davis]

before one should try
to heal the world
it might be better to
understand each other first
before one should try to
measure the world
it might be better to
change ourselves first,

hands held tight we move forward

to face the fire and evil winds

set before us.


Yes...very well stated.

[Adam Greenfield]

Great follow up! You've left it open for it to only get better. I'm curious, though. Only three parts?

[Aries]

This is absolutely wonderful.....so much truth and wisdom here!!

Keep up the wonderful writing~