letter to the future (Part 1)

a little fantasy here.....straying somewhat away from my usual type of writing.

  it's an old story that
has been around for many years,
it's an old story and
it will tell you something...

 

it happened during dark times
when the wind blew much
harder than ever before,
the evil wind of
a terrible disease.

 

therefore the prince decided
to lock himself up in his castle
alone with his friends,

he thought to stay
locked up there and
to wait until the fear
and the obscurity
would yield and allow his soul to breathe,

wishing this satanic wind to blow by,

salvaging his mind and never come back.

 

in the castle there was joy
and people had a great time
eating and dancing
and nobody ever
believed that the
evil wind would ever
reach the castle
but at the end it did

despite their false sense of security.

 

I write you this story because
it sounds like some history that
repeats itself and keeps coming back,

I write you this story
because soon you will be born
and who knows how the city
will look like once that
wind will have died down.

 

I don’t know what kind of
world you will grow up in,
I only hope that you will be a
son of a new and better society.





 

Author's Note

this poem is written and mean't to be thought provoking, since it's fantasy I'm curious to see how my readers interpret this piece. There should be a varying degree of comments and what is important is I want to hear the varying opinions my readers get out of this piece. I hope you enjoy the read and let me know what this poem means to each of you. Some of you may find the story somewhat incomplete and you would be right in that judgement.....it is Part 1 of a series which I'm working on, be patient, I'm working on part 2 and 3:).......Also, if you haven't gotten the chance to read my poem Young hearts with Wings I'd strongly recommend giving it a read.....it is my little own masterpiece I consider.....would greatly appreciate anyone who hasn't read it yet to comment the piece. Thank-you, Nico.

Reviews

[Bear]

"his only hope was that he would be a son of a new and better society"... a fine wish indeed but, I believe that for society to become new and better each one of us has to contribute to making IT BETTER in whatever ways we can. Whether it be sharing our thought upon this site, chatting with strangers while out and about forming new friendships as our paths continue to cross... who knows if "society" will ever become equal for all, where it is "all for one and one for all"? Difficult it must be since obviously we have miles of improvement to attend to. Perhaps we need to STOP writing history and teaching it to our children... seems as though the history we and our parents were taught just lent the O.K. to continue on as is; repeating and repeating when up against the wall? Gee, I'm done diggin' this hole, it'll depress me if I continue. I do ramble on as I search for the words to express the thoughts within. Letter to the Future... re-read the past, learn from it and please don't repeat. ;~) Bear

[*~Imperfectly Me~*]

I really like this... It is very thought provoking... It kind of makes me wonder what they did to deserve the harsh wind you know... cause karma always comes to bite you in the a*s... For some reason it doesn't flow right to me... but thats only one reader's opinion... Anyway, great job...

[Patsy]

What comes to my mind is a man that is experiencing schizophrenia - and wanting to stay in that state of mine... I wish there could be more to read... Will you continue this story? I enjoyed it... Love the picture you chose too!

[Mark Pearce]

The ill wind blows, and I suppose that ill wind can stand for many things...things that could be improved upon making this a better world.

The touch of fantasy and the touch of reality mix pretty well.

The prince's fate? Similar to ours, I suppose.

[Lucinda Bogart]

Political commentary on leaders and governments that hide away, surrounded be those of their own ilk to eat, drink, and be merry while the citizens suffer outside the walls, consumed by consequences which are the result of nare do well leaders who believe they will never be visited by the evil they have propigated upon the earth and her inhabitants.

[Albert Freeman]

I like this poem. There is a potential story behind it or a number of other poems around it. A father or mother talking to the womb about what has happened and what will happen. A story of a prince who chose to abandon his people in his fear instead of helping them, and the story of an evil wind with disease borne upon it visiting a nation and corrupting it. Fun read and very imaginative.

[Chad Wesley Allbrett]

I thought that it was creepy; but being as how I rather like horror that's a good thing. I'm not saying that horror is what you intended, but in some ways it appears like an allegorical exercise in social commentary. I don't know if the social commentary mixes well with the fantasy, but you did have me riveted, and awaiting of the outcome. More please?

[Marie]

You do know how to write what you feel and how to express it with pictures as well. Great work.

[['tatiz speis]]

It's funny.... The satanic winds reminded me of the Santa Ana winds and how it just makes everyone who experiences it go a little crazy.

[TamerQtaish]

It sure is thought provoking!
I truly loved the reading... Well done my friend...

All the best,
Tamer

[Damien Dsoul]

OOhhhhh ... such a spooky sort of story. At least it does being with a certain dark spookiness that's just as enchanting as it is quite revealing. Although it's a little unfortunate that the story bit is somehow incomplete. But then again it isn't meant to be, but rather the dark metaphor that lurks underneath helps revive the story from falling. Quite enchanting: dark story time cometh!