letter to the future (Part 1)

a little fantasy here.....straying somewhat away from my usual type of writing.

  it's an old story that
has been around for many years,
it's an old story and
it will tell you something...

 

it happened during dark times
when the wind blew much
harder than ever before,
the evil wind of
a terrible disease.

 

therefore the prince decided
to lock himself up in his castle
alone with his friends,

he thought to stay
locked up there and
to wait until the fear
and the obscurity
would yield and allow his soul to breathe,

wishing this satanic wind to blow by,

salvaging his mind and never come back.

 

in the castle there was joy
and people had a great time
eating and dancing
and nobody ever
believed that the
evil wind would ever
reach the castle
but at the end it did

despite their false sense of security.

 

I write you this story because
it sounds like some history that
repeats itself and keeps coming back,

I write you this story
because soon you will be born
and who knows how the city
will look like once that
wind will have died down.

 

I don’t know what kind of
world you will grow up in,
I only hope that you will be a
son of a new and better society.





 

Author's Note

this poem is written and mean't to be thought provoking, since it's fantasy I'm curious to see how my readers interpret this piece. There should be a varying degree of comments and what is important is I want to hear the varying opinions my readers get out of this piece. I hope you enjoy the read and let me know what this poem means to each of you. Some of you may find the story somewhat incomplete and you would be right in that judgement.....it is Part 1 of a series which I'm working on, be patient, I'm working on part 2 and 3:).......Also, if you haven't gotten the chance to read my poem Young hearts with Wings I'd strongly recommend giving it a read.....it is my little own masterpiece I consider.....would greatly appreciate anyone who hasn't read it yet to comment the piece. Thank-you, Nico.

Reviews

[Bear]

"his only hope was that he would be a son of a new and better society"... a fine wish indeed but, I believe that for society to become new and better each one of us has to contribute to making IT BETTER in whatever ways we can. Whether it be sharing our thought upon this site, chatting with strangers while out and about forming new friendships as our paths continue to cross... who knows if "society" will ever become equal for all, where it is "all for one and one for all"? Difficult it must be since obviously we have miles of improvement to attend to. Perhaps we need to STOP writing history and teaching it to our children... seems as though the history we and our parents were taught just lent the O.K. to continue on as is; repeating and repeating when up against the wall? Gee, I'm done diggin' this hole, it'll depress me if I continue. I do ramble on as I search for the words to express the thoughts within. Letter to the Future... re-read the past, learn from it and please don't repeat. ;~) Bear

[Catrinka]

I really enjoyed this piece, Nico. It seems you are talking to a soul who has yet to be born, how intriguing! Maybe I'm reading too deep into it, but for me it also seems to have a reference to reincarnation too, yes? History does repeat itself, and not just in one generation, but perhaps also in each soul until it learns and evolves to a higher level... It's a fascinating read and I would like to read the next parts when you are done (send me a read request) I like the imagery you create in the reader's mind - the castle, the prince and his friends evokes a medival feel, and I also love the pic you've chosen, by the way :-) Kudos! Great write!

[Kasey Klein]

This line:
(but at the end it did)
despite their false sense of security.

A false sense of security isn't going to prevent anything, so despite is out of place.


I get the classic tale, the corruption of power(those in charge), and the overweening denial manifested by hubris.

Indeed: "it sounds like some history that
repeats itself and keeps coming back" (Which is a bit redundant, by the way)

[Aries]

I thought this was very powerful and thought provoking.

I hope for a better future for those yet to come, but society will have to work for that~

Wonderfully Written~

[Mel Stevens]

When first reading the poem, my initial thoughts were of a play on Rapunzel, or Sleeping Beauty. However, by the end of the piece, I began to realize the more realistic problems of society and how people are easy to ignore the worst if it doesn't fit into their plans.

[thecoolone52]

its a good prolouge....... a little anxious to see what part 2 brings to the table...... it remind of camelot right now but im sure oyu will kinda fix it and dress it up the way you want it to.......... GOOD luck wit it!!

[Carole]

I echo Kathie Valentine in her review of this piece, Nico. I am believing the world will turn around for the better as the days go by. Very thought provoking. Thank you for sharing. You put a lot into this one and it shows. Well done!

[Valentine]

Nico..looking at the whole world today and how all of the hatred and wars and dieeases continue to grow and peaople of races, religions , and color hating each other..I too pray for a better world for the generations to come...God bless...Valentine

[Valorie J. Shearer]

While reading this, I found myself thinking about exactly what is happening now. War, global warming, recession, racism, chaos, etc. What kind of world are children being born into now? What type of world will they grow up in? It's a very saddening to me.. I look forward to reading your other work Nico. I love the picture by the way! Take care~~~

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my intrepertation of this is that the words speak of old but I picture the present. I do like it though. I cant wait to hear part 2 and 3 so far so good!!

[forfila]

This is a great story, and I can only hope too that the young are going to be born into a better society. I also think on another level in this poem that maybe, just maybe the world is slowly turning around, well at least, I hope so..

Nice poem.