darkness has your eyes

a one way romance and trying to let go.....to realize the reality and accepting it is sometimes so very difficult to do.......even if you know you can never have her...and probably never did.......

I've strongly thought about you
I've continuously had you on my mind
I've tried to bring
you back to me...
I imagine bringing you back
to me at any cost

 

I have always kept
bright white lights on
in the fog in order
not to loose each other anymore,
how many useless defenses I've erected
I did not want to succumb to your spell.

 

now that darkness has your eyes
I don't sleep anymore at night
your incredible azzuri eyes
are so beautiful, they bring tears to my eyes
but rarely are they serene.

 

darkness has your eyes
you are the only one
with such beautiful eyes
how will I ever manage
not to look at them anymore...

 

I have loved you
but I have exaggerated
you have captured my whole broken heart
my every breathe was in your hands
you left me hopelessly in despair
and therefore, with a heavy heart

I fill those prairie sands

with anger filled footprints

which you ignore to follow....

 

maybe I should try
to convince myself

that I must forget you,

to take down those fences

that never captured you,

and try to clear my mind of you,

so that the darkness no longer

brings me to those beautiful azzuri eyes......

how will I ever manage
not to have them to admire anymore...   

 

 

 

Reviews

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

This is a feeling - well expressed - that we can all relate too - one in which only one is truly enamoured with the other or is even willing to give what is necessary to sustain a relationship. A melancholic tune I feel for the narrator of this work. Thank you.
Light,
Siddartha

[julian3]

I'm only just starting to read your works, but I must say tshi right away - one of my favorite writers of song and poetry was Jacques Brel. Your verse here reflects so much of his style and manner, it is excellent! The themes of longing and love sought and lost, the flashing contrast of inner emotions of hurt, anger, and still smoldering embers of love. A number of my own works touch these same themes, in my own style and manner, but your work here is most enjoyable. I look forward to reading more of your work, as time allows.

[Mountain Dawn]

I love the feelings this invoke. The despair, loneliness, sadness... Beautiful! Looking forward to reading more of your work.

[Kara Emily Krantz]

fences that never captured you.. prairies...

"how many useless defenses I've erected"

all of these images and lines and more.... wonderful piece. i really enjoyed it

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There is nothing but bad news here, no happy ending. I think your words are great, but the formation could have been better Nico..."I have loved you, but I have exaggerated" I'm not sure where you are going with that line because she is either beautiful or not?? Your sentiments are wonderful, just revise the structure a little and give it some order...
Cheers,
Helen :-)))

[Phil Sanders]

Sad and beautiful .........

[The Archangel Gabriel]

They say, "Tis better to have loved and lost..." Then again, I think that "they" smoke crack. Don't believe the hype.

Great write.

-Gabe

[laceyjane23]

very nice job! i think just about everyone can relate to feeling this way about a relationship a time or two. you have a very creative way with words!
laceyjane

[Brianna Brie]

I have loved you
but I have exaggerated
you have captured my whole broken heart
my every breathe was in your hands
you left me hopelessly in despair
and therefore, with a heavy heart

maybe I should try
to convince myself
that I must forget you,
to take down those fences
that never captured you,
and try to clear my mind of you,

Yes, I have to agree with others in that "Darkness has your eyes" is a title that grabs you. This is a tough one for me to read. It hits home. Getting back to the darkness has your eyes...it reminds me of the cold, indifferent side my love displays. The brief displays of passion are incredible and it keeps me coming back for more, because I know it is there far above any body else's. The dark side however kills me in the process of waiting for the passion to be unleashed. Many times I have said to myself "I must forget you".

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I thought it was pretty good. I have never seen a better poem about eyes. Most sound cliche and this one was far from it I like it a lot

[James Takeo Panton]

this is beautifully sculpted.....great work!