darkness has your eyes

a one way romance and trying to let go.....to realize the reality and accepting it is sometimes so very difficult to do.......even if you know you can never have her...and probably never did.......

I've strongly thought about you
I've continuously had you on my mind
I've tried to bring
you back to me...
I imagine bringing you back
to me at any cost

 

I have always kept
bright white lights on
in the fog in order
not to loose each other anymore,
how many useless defenses I've erected
I did not want to succumb to your spell.

 

now that darkness has your eyes
I don't sleep anymore at night
your incredible azzuri eyes
are so beautiful, they bring tears to my eyes
but rarely are they serene.

 

darkness has your eyes
you are the only one
with such beautiful eyes
how will I ever manage
not to look at them anymore...

 

I have loved you
but I have exaggerated
you have captured my whole broken heart
my every breathe was in your hands
you left me hopelessly in despair
and therefore, with a heavy heart

I fill those prairie sands

with anger filled footprints

which you ignore to follow....

 

maybe I should try
to convince myself

that I must forget you,

to take down those fences

that never captured you,

and try to clear my mind of you,

so that the darkness no longer

brings me to those beautiful azzuri eyes......

how will I ever manage
not to have them to admire anymore...   

 

 

 

Reviews

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

This is a feeling - well expressed - that we can all relate too - one in which only one is truly enamoured with the other or is even willing to give what is necessary to sustain a relationship. A melancholic tune I feel for the narrator of this work. Thank you.
Light,
Siddartha

[Norma J. Jessee]

A very emotional piece. I believe a lot of people can connect with this.

A beautifully written heartfelt write.

Thank you for sharing.

[Patsy]

That was very touching... I have had those feelings so long at some point in my life... Kept thinking about a lost love ALL the time...

[TamerQtaish]

Darkness once again!
I just have to respect the way you have placed your feelings within this...
Well done and perfectly written...

All the best,
Tamer Qtaish

[poddar kushal]

very well done. your words have not left the emotion half cooked

[*** Hey Jude***]

Your heart speaks strongly in this beautifully written piece. The pain that our hearts go through seem insurmountable at times, but the eye's you fell in love with weren't able to return the ideal love you had for her. Try to heal as quickly as possible :-), do you know how many single woman that are out there that will treat you like a prince? Great work! ~ Jude xo

[Rhiannon Dragonraine]

I like the imagery though I am not sure I like the tone- it has an undersurrent near obsession- that is slightly disturbing; this is a good write and conveys alot of emotion Well done.

[Antony]

Nico, you have captured the feelings of remorse and have poured out your heart to this lovely woman, with the azzuri eyes, quite beautiful at that. It is sad but true, that at times we need to move on and at times our love for that person won't let us, that is how I read this last plea of yours.
Antony

[Natalie C]

Nico, this was really a great piece, filled with brilliant imagery and wonderful metaphors.

I specially liked;
I fill those prairie sands
with anger filled footprints
which you ignore to follow.... Brilliantly said, anger filled footprints really brings forth the anger of a love not returned. Forcing your readers to feel angry with you as you walk down your life's path, searching for escape

Also;
to take down those fences
that never captured you, .... a person can only do so much to keep that person you admire and love the most close to you. Thought this was a brilliant metaphor, bringing out the desperateness of keeping a dying love alive.

Wonderfully written, your emotions clearly expressed. Leaving your readers with the sense of sadness for the character whom has to eventually begin to pick up the pieces of a broken life!

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This is good! Its very moving for any one who has ever loved and lost it. It really is good.

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Unrequited love is a painful thing, and you've captured its nature quite poignantly in this piece.

Your writing has a pleasing multilingual flavor in the English translation; for example, the use of the Italian "azzuri" in describing the subject's eyes. It's refreshing, and it adds a certain flair and panache to the piece.

A quick suggestion: in the fourth line of the second stanza, the word should be spelled "lose." Loose is the opposite to tight. "Perdre" as opposed to "detache."

Good writing!