darkness has your eyes

a one way romance and trying to let go.....to realize the reality and accepting it is sometimes so very difficult to do.......even if you know you can never have her...and probably never did.......

I've strongly thought about you
I've continuously had you on my mind
I've tried to bring
you back to me...
I imagine bringing you back
to me at any cost

 

I have always kept
bright white lights on
in the fog in order
not to loose each other anymore,
how many useless defenses I've erected
I did not want to succumb to your spell.

 

now that darkness has your eyes
I don't sleep anymore at night
your incredible azzuri eyes
are so beautiful, they bring tears to my eyes
but rarely are they serene.

 

darkness has your eyes
you are the only one
with such beautiful eyes
how will I ever manage
not to look at them anymore...

 

I have loved you
but I have exaggerated
you have captured my whole broken heart
my every breathe was in your hands
you left me hopelessly in despair
and therefore, with a heavy heart

I fill those prairie sands

with anger filled footprints

which you ignore to follow....

 

maybe I should try
to convince myself

that I must forget you,

to take down those fences

that never captured you,

and try to clear my mind of you,

so that the darkness no longer

brings me to those beautiful azzuri eyes......

how will I ever manage
not to have them to admire anymore...   

 

 

 

Reviews

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

This is a feeling - well expressed - that we can all relate too - one in which only one is truly enamoured with the other or is even willing to give what is necessary to sustain a relationship. A melancholic tune I feel for the narrator of this work. Thank you.
Light,
Siddartha

[jen -- JG]

When you love someone to the point of obsession it is soooo damn hard to let go. The belief that the strength of your love is somehow strong enough to draw the person to you is a magnet too hard to walk away from.

The first few lines here indicate this type of obsessive lov - the constant thing about with strong thoughts and the imagined bringing back - no matter what the cost.

The second verse tells me your love could be the partner of either a family member or of a friend and while drawn to her you are doing the decent thing by keeping your distance, building obstacles and fences to to keep yourself from falling under her spell.

Darkness has your eyes - a beautiful line and so sad - because this darkess is inside you and you have no escape.

Even so, you have a strong awareness and even though there is also a strong sense of loss, you have your answer... it's there in you last verse... and so is the fear of what will happen if you succeed, how will you handle not seeing her beautiful eyes again........

A poem stating facts and skirting the original despair a little - but allowing the bigger despair to hold sway with the final lines.

A good write bringing the feelings those of us who have gone through something like will be able to relate to very well.

cheers

jen-JG

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Brilliant write!
You actually very well explained the entire feel and emotions!
Yet! I think so you still need to work upon it's flow somewhere in middle, where I didn't found it's flow very much appealing!
I mean, this is infact a brilliant piece and could even become a better write than this!
But, indeed it's a great write!
Thanks for sharing it! :)

[Lucinda Bogart]

A very good description of the circular thinking, utter hopelessness, and depression of unrequite love.

[alternative_be]

It happens so often that we love those we cannot reach... for they are a mystery to us and mankind will always be attracted to mystifying creatures. I know the feeling, I've been there... But in the end, we have to let go ... it hurts. Your poem says it all.

[sthrlnd (annmarie)]

I have loved you
but I have exaggerated
you have captured my whole broken heart
my every breathe was in your hands
you left me hopelessly in despair
and therefore, with a heavy heart

I fill those prairie sands

with anger filled footprints

which you ignore to follow....


ABSOLUTELY WONDERFUL!
NO Passion, No pain...Love such as this has such a high price....

annmarie

[Joseph - Michael]

That was really great, I mean, I can related to that in the most way. I once loved someone and she changed for worse and I don't even know who she is anymore

On the other hand, it's all still great and it's going to be on my list as well...

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

emotional write - fantastic!

[Thanh]

great job!!!

[Jd Young]

This poem definitely shows me the change in certain people over time. I start to think of all the things that I've seen go bad in people. This poem was dark. Truly remarkable.

[Dani California]

This is so sad as is emerged in heartbreak, something most of us relate to. Very emotional and well written. You bring the reader into the emotion .... awesome work :)