The Two of Us

  where are you, how are you
it can be hard
I know, you know.

 

I stop at a red light at the crossroad
you are the one I am looking for amongest everyone
by foot, in a cab or in a bus
two eyes looking at you and then going away
into brisk winds, lost in traffic
cars honking madly in laughable chaos.

 

where are you, how are you
I'll change, if you change
the two of us, we are alike
two wrestlers, two veterans

Two love songs as you and I
with the same words in a cafe.

 

I just want to say now that you are leaving
if that is love, you'll see love
you'll be living because of love.

 

What are you doing tonight
I phone, you're not home, says leave a message
but the recorder is so much faster than I
thus I never know what to say.

 

where are you, how are you
you're not there, where are you going
I am here, like you are
with this scare to love.

 

two minutes, two hours, forever
duelists in the sea of this town
where everyone needs love
exactly as we do........

 

where are you, how are you
two even if, you're not there
you and I, always or never
we are like we are
we exist as two.

Nico S.           

Reviews

[Robert Luna]

You always write with such emotion and truthfulness to your words. I liked the way you added the pictures to paint the scenes a little clearer. This was a wonderful piece and the story is something i am sure most have experienced at some point in life.


Wel Done!!!!!!

[Sean M. Addams]

nicely painted picture in this imagery was very good in this piece... very impressive... great job on this

[Brianna Brie]

two minutes, two hours, forever
duelists in the sea of this town
where everyone needs love
exactly as we do........

Been there done that...relentlessly searching faces in a crowd for the one I still love. Stellar write.

[THE BLACK SEAL]

a touch of finesse

[TL Boehm]

soulful and elegant - beautifully punctuated by the graphics. well done.

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

It seems these two are seperated by so much that I was surprised and happy to find them as two in the end. Thank you for sharing. Interesting write.
Light,
Siddartha

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

A pleasure to read. I admire your work. Wonderfully written, nicely done.

Great Write.

[S.Tessier]

This is really good. I could really relate to both poems. I liked your imagery used in both. But my favorite of the two was the first one about them looking at the other. It was super awesome!

[Jd Young]

A love poem between two people conveyed by one person, truly beautiful. It has a striking prose like that of a person that has written in in the hopes of saving their long lost lover. There seems to be a tinge of desperation behind the words that captivates any reader, including myself. This poem is gold and fire, it mixes very well. But I also agree, the pictures don't convey the message as well as your words do. But it's great to see that there is solid imagery with the poem. I often feel that I'm like the speaker in this poem, searching and wanting, and then coming to realize that what I have is right in front of me. it's amazing that you wrote this so well, in such few words.

This was a great read.
Well Done!

[laceyjane23]

i really like this poem! great job, i love the images you included with it as well it really adds to the piece!
laceyjane

[J.P. Bristow]

"duelists in the sea of this town"....great perspectives here! Picture perfect.