You will Leave

 

Oh, no! Here is that moment
I feared for a long time, you know
I already know
what it is you are going to tell me,
that it's the end of us.

I know that with him
you feel more free
to accept his love;
to count on him more

What a shock to me,
I who gave you everything inside of me
As you go you are taking my heart with you

One love forever
lasts only an instant
There are so many memories
that vanish with you
Only that dream remains,
the story of lovers,
but in the end you will leave me.

This city that I think of myself as being
is deserted of tears
I feel my heart drowning inside of me
while you are with him.

They say that you don't die from love;
You don't loose anything;
But now I feel that fire dying within me

I also know I should be happy for you
But I lie, because
I wish you to stay here with me

But, in the end
you will leave
you will leave, leave in pain
you will leave
and be far from me.

Nico S.
 

Reviews

[TamerQtaish]

beautiful poem, sweet words spoken with pain, its as almost you lost someone!
Well if thats the case, its her lost bro

I would had done a few things in another way, but honestly I am not sure if it would had came out as beautiful as this... a solute you

All the best,
Tamer Qtaish

[Sean M. Addams]

very heartfelt piece with great imagery of emotion and pain of loss ... great job on this one!

[Steffi]

Oh, no! Here is that moment
I feared for a long time, you know
I already know
what it is you are going to tell me"

[Robert Luna]

I liked the realism words that painted such a emotional releasing of openness to bear witness to. I think you captured the essences of a pure emotion and displayed it so effectively. I really liked this piece. I always love to be left feeling something at the end of a read.


Great Job!!!!!

[The Lovely Sound Of Cra..]

Damn. You know, a lot of your poetry really relates to me. I know what this is like to.
Very sad poem. The content makes me want to punch a wall cause I reminisce of a girl that screwed me over like that, but I got over her and I'm with someone who truly does make me happy. I hope you find a new person who really doesn't hurt you and whom really loves you. Don't give up!

Stay up, Nico.

[Sally Edwards]

Such pain and loss in your words, I have tears in my eyes, I want to tell her to stop, not to leave you all alone.I like

As you go you are taking my heart with you

the best, such a poignant sentence, great honest work again,

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

fully expressed with the emotions of how one feels to be left. wonderfully written.


Great Write.
Rayne

[Carole]

My heart can't help but break for you. It is very difficult to be rejected. Your expression was heart felt and to the point. Very well written. Commitment is something many aren't willing to do these days, and it is sad.

[R J Askew]

Again this is direct and there is no mistaking the power of the feeling......the line I like best is 'But I lie...' As with the angel poem...two sides to every feeling! The poem is very honest in how it captures the stormy feelings caused by love withdrawn.

[Lorraine Pearson]

Honest write.
~Lorraiyne

[JC Fox]

This was a great poem, one can almost feel the loss