Have you felt the pain,
of a dream that was never gained?
Now, maybe I'm no billionaire, and I still don't care, maybe I don't own plane in my life I got carried away, don't think I own a fast car on the fast road I'm no threat,
Standing here in the dark, looking at the moon to spark,
no effect in my mind,
Here I go again, trying to go back, even though back home I'm considered a fool, maybe they're right, who knows? Hiding behind a dream, thinking of some lie to tell them.
Daddies little girl wants a brand new car, she's dreaming of an alibi, "Honey I need you right now, you can't just drive as far as you need" He wants her home with any expense
Early one morning the sun was shining, a playboy woke up from his bed, wondering if he's still the same, if his life was not away, his folks never dreamed for all this, sure it was really rough he never did like his mamas way of life, his papa's wasn't there enough Heading off for the west coast, he had a dream getting through
Abandoned all his problems back home looking in the mirror thinking back to his road "Don't you think, I better be my way back home?"
We all dreamed of something big, we all thought that we're not average, that we're bigger than anything, maybe unbeatable, that's maybe true who knows? But then life hit like the express train, so we're still back to the basic plan, keep dreaming....(the poem has three main stories)
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Touching piece, love the complex presentation of life and mentioning the reference of the place where we started dreaming is an excellent reflection how the story affects the readers. Great work. Thanks for sharing Nick.
nick, the more i read your work, the more i see you bleak views on this life.. must say that life doesn't always go awry, it has ups and it has downs, but we must try and focus on the light in life, if we don't then where is our hope? i know its hard right now, but give this life some time, God will work things out, he always does:)
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Yeah that's me, a little gloomy, but the poem was about something else...anyway thanks for the read .. read moreYeah that's me, a little gloomy, but the poem was about something else...anyway thanks for the read and for the review :D
It doesn't matter if you're rich or poor, loneliness comes in all forms. You've written a sad and painful poem, when dreaming on the road is as good as it gets. Great work Nicky.
Not bad. You have a few grammar errors here and there but nothing too major. You have a good concept and you use some very good imagery in this piece. Good work.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thank you, I appreciate taking the time for reading this poem.
"Standing here in the dark, looking at the moon to spark,
no effect in my mind,
Here I go again, trying to go back,
even though back home I'm considered a fool,"
That is some good poetry...:)
dream.
it's not wrong to, i guess, and yes we do think we are unbeatable till out ego gets a hit across the face.
i love the last story, the question implied at the end, the first one about people not understanding hurts.
beautiful poem for a sad thought,
but keep dreaming, it feels better.
The place where time stands still, where whisky flows and always will. Where's that place you will ask, God said "Out on Highway 61"
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