Something's wrong with the world

A poem about modern society....

Have you ever seen a world so dark,
that keeps you in there and never lets go,
people are yelling "please,all i want to is to say hello"

The world is full of loneliness and agony,
only those who accepts the pain survive
nobody talks, nobody feels,
there is only whisper and fear...
Whisper,"that someday the sun will come and take all away"
Fear "that this abyss will only be just another replay"

Author's Note

While hearing at the radio Aerosmith's songs "Living on the edge" and with the help of some bourbon, I've made something (hope is good? not? maybe? who knows? )

"There's something right with the world today
And everybody knows it's wrong
But we can tell 'em no or we could let it go
But I would rather be a hanging on"

Reviews

[Inspiring Writer]

Ist stanza's third line's awesome. You've to write more on it. Great job, the flow if awesome. Words're deep and nicely penned.

[Nick.B]

Thanks for the review I appreciate it.

[Poussiere D'Ange]

Thevworld has bece a sad place to live in with modern people and their selfishness and emptiness. I can relate to this for this is whats happening around me and this is what i feel. You have done an amazing job here Nick. Great poem:-):-):-D.

[Nick.B]

Thanks for taking the time, I appreciate it :D

[DCT ponderings]

This is a common discussion among my closest and dearest and I. But I have yet to hear another express it so well. James Patterson wrote the world is "absurd and meaningless" and there is not a day gone by that I don't feel it. As our sense of connection to one another grows increasingly divided I often remark that my biggest fear is that this is the new norm, that we will forget to say hello.

Great Piece!

[Nick.B]

Interesting discussion the two of you have....thank you for the great review, I appreciate taking the time to read this and for reviewing it, sometimes the world can be a cruel place to live, sometimes it can be just a lonely place....

[DCT ponderings]

Well today is a little less lonely. Hello! ;)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Too true... With more people in the world than ever before, and more ideas floating around than ever before, you would think the last thing that anyone would be is lonely, but it seems that the farther we go with technology and the like, the more withdrawn the populous becomes, until lonliness is tragic.

[Nick.B]

True, we tend to get more colder, greed starts to control us, we want more (phones, all the new gadgets....) anyway thank you for your review I appreciate it

[Quill~]

Nicky this is sad and heartfelt. I feel every bit of what you've conveyed! Great thoughts penned here! Fab song!

[Nick.B]

Thanks for the review quill, I really appreciate taking the time

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

This is really true, love the authenticity of this piece. great story progression and very engaging piece. I love it more the last two lines validate the uniqueness of this work.

[Nick.B]

Thank you, I appreciate it :D

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

:) welcome

[InsanityWriter]

I like it. :) Good work. ^_^

[Nick.B]

Thank you :D

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

Dont worry ...K....I am J..
we r the MIB
wear the suit and lest git goin

[Nick.B]

:)))

[Sami Khalil]

"The world is full of loneliness and agony,
only those who accepts the pain survive
nobody talks, nobody feels,
there is only whisper and fear..."
So much beauty and wisdom in your words...Pen on...:)

[Nick.B]

Thanks for taking the time to read and to review, I appreciate it :D

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...Any time...:)