Fallen parent

Watching him fall,was never an easy task for a parent to do,
all he wanted from him was to get out of the blue,

As a parent he always showed that tough love,
"Maybe I have crossed the line here",said the devastated parent with tear in his heart,
his boy was down,just a soulless body for him left to bury,
in the parent's eyes you can see the fury,
in his mind there was only questions without any answers,

"How all of this happened?"
"How can God leave me ?"

As he went alone home,
he was feeling the coldness of the house,
for the first time,
in that night he couldn't sleep,
because the thoughts went too deep,
his mind was going crazy,as he fell into the darkness of loneliness,
He cries for the rest of his life,never to see his boy again,never to reach for the stars tomorrow,
never to see his smile ever again.

You can even hear him crying today,
only by those who feels his pain,
in the middle of the night,
you can feel his broken soul wondering all the way
who can't even see his child how he plays....

Author's Note

Tear it apart, spit on it, hate it, love it, like it...let me hear it....

Reviews

[Anna]

Very heart breaking subject.
For being your second language (from what i've gotten in the comments)
you portrayed your thoughts really well. There are a few places that could be changed. Make sure you don't put any fluff in there. If the line is bringing anything, its not needed. Over all this is really good.

[Nick.B]

Thanks

[Acer]

sad but beautiful write, such pieces comes from heart indeed.

[Nick.B]

Thank you, I appreciate it

[Acer]

you're welcome :-'')

[Red Brick Keshner]

The truth is often sad, but we can alter our path by our timely & prudent responses.

[Nick.B]

Yes, you're right, thank you for your review

[Red Brick Keshner]

You are most welcome. Thanks for sharing your thought provoking poem.

[Be myself!]

Love it.

[rnuff]

it's a sad write, but i like it

[Nick.B]

Thank you

[Quill~]

This is beautiful. It breaks my heart. You have expressed a poignant write.

[Nick.B]

Thank you...:D

[emmajoy]

Such a sad, sad picture you've painted with your words. I don't know if factual or imagined, but whichever, the emotion is very powerful, very tragic. Like the way there's metered verse amongst the free; most of your phrasing is very fine. Is English a second language, in which case, you treat it very respectfully?

The last stanza is .. heart=breaking.

[Nick.B]

Thank you for the review...(my second comment on English as a second language, but still I'm trying to get better)...anyway thank you again for your comment :D