New York Time

    Taking a new road in a new town
    thinking that this new start can't be that bad,
    had enough of all this misery and reality,
    thinking New York is my escape from this mentality

    Seeing how the Hudson river flows,
    seeing all the people glow,

    "Maybe this could be it?
    Maybe this new song isn't that hard for me to hear it,
    why not try to sing it
    Maybe this New York time it's for me?"

    Coming from the Highway
    where no joyful man has ever been,
    I really want to be one of them,
    but this Highway is full of broken souls,

    Thinking that I could never reach that goal,
    running from all the control
    "Maybe this New York time it's for me,I really want to enroll!"

Reviews

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

If this is migration then its good....if its a state of mind and a virtual tour its better:)

[Nick.B]

Thanks

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

yes

[Michael G.]

This is a good write. Well composed and smooth. It did call to mind two songs on the subject. One was "New York State of Mind," as mentioned by Quill. And much further back in time, "On Broadway" by The Drifters.

[Nick.B]

Thank you for your review, I appreciate it

[Nona]

wow! you are truly my soul mate! I love New York - it gives me so much energy and really uplifts my spirit, my passion and my ambition for life! on the philosophical side, places do not make people happy - because happiness is only inside you! I love this poem for its childish exploratory drive and hunger for LIFE! thank you!

[Nick.B]

No. Thank you for the comment...(and yes it's a bit childish....how was that warren zevon song "don't let us get old, don't let us get stupid" :D)...anyway thanks for the review

[vspjaguar]

Going to New York with new hopes,a brand new chapter.I like that feeling,starting everything with a clean slate again.

Very expressive poem.I could extract the feel from the poem.Very well written!

[Nick.B]

Thank you

[Quill~]

Now the song "Empire state of mind" is in my head. :)
I enjoyed reading this piece. There is a hopeful attitude in this write. Nice work.

[Nick.B]

Thank you

[marie]

a good write a little rough around the edges but that is easily fixed, of course i have no right to tell you how to put your own work so i will leave it at that and simply say that it is a pretty good piece

[Nick.B]

It's no problem you can tear it apart if you want, I just want to learn (it's the ending isn't it :D that feels a little rough )

[marie]

its really a bunch of my own opinions, basically the punctuations detract from the entire piece, yes the last line is a little off and could be reworded, basically thats it, but both of those are considered the writers choice and you shouldn't do them unless you think it would add to the overall piece

[Nick.B]

Okay, thank you for the review

[marie]

no problem

[rnuff]

Love that 4th stanza, This is so wonderful.
Like the emotions. Awesome writing!

[Nick.B]

Thank you, glad you like it