Drawn in the dark

They think I'm funny
and have no problems
But this mask is so well structured,
they can't see that I'm so angered
I'm just hiding, just a man trying to survive...
I'm a clown forgotten by the spirits,
Doomed to be alive and lonely, never to have any visits,
Behind this mask I am a loner, walking in the darkness for years,
making people laugh so hard, they forget that I have lost...
Even this city is getting weaker, it's impossible to cross,
They can never see my pain, all is gone,
except for a drawn in the dark...

Reviews

[Be myself!]

Very creative. I love it. I can relate.

[Nick.B]

Thank you

[Be myself!]

Yor welcome

[hardik]

I know what that feeling is. No ome knows who you are and what you're thinking. Wishing someone would bother to get to know you. Its my life's story as well. Marvellously put. Hats off

[Nick.B]

Glad you felt the write :D...and thanks for the review

[hardik]

No. Thank You for putting all that into words. It really touched my heart

[IcYLuVa]

This speaks truth so beautifully. Well worded, I liked it a lot :)

[Nick.B]

Thank you, glad you like it :D

[Levita G. Gonzalez]

I really liked the piece. I think you could find more impact if you looked at your spacings and breaks...but that's just me!

[Nick.B]

Thank you, I'll look into what you've said and will edit the poem...again thank you for the review

[MOON]

We all wear the mask, pretend we happy when we not. Very good write.

[Nick.B]

Thank you

[ShayElexis(:]

I like how it isn't all cheerful ;P but it seriously is a good.

[Nick.B]

Thank you for the review...really appreciate it:D

[ShayElexis(:]

No Problem -^-^-