Distant Sun

For Jack...

The haze has built a bridge

across the sky
 anchored solidly
 to the peaks of the mountains
 above me 

right now.

The sun is but a memory
 glimpsed at

in the ripples of the river
 and the glare

 of pick-up truck headlights.

Reviews

[Clouded in Hopeful Illu..]

This is seemingly such a short poem, but I can’t help coming back to it time and time again and envisioning something different each time. There is so much that can be taken from this depending on what kind of mind set the reader is in when they read it. I thoroughly enjoy this piece because I do get something new and different from it each time.

The first read through, I thought maybe this had to do with drugs because of the first stanza. I could see how a person may be able to travel and anchor themselves somewhere that would otherwise be impossible. It made me think of the Native Americans and their ability to eat hallucinogens and have out of body experiences that would cause the experience in itself seem as if a distant memory.

The second read through took a much more tragic turn for me. I thought about death. A haze that built a bridge across skies to the mountains as if a spirit released from its corporal housing would travel freely with the distant memories of the sun, and I took the headlights as the actual cause of death. That the speaker was killed from being hit by a truck. Morbid right?

The third read through was much more serene. I thought about a lazy day by the river, where silence and hope and love of life prevailed. As if the speaker is imagining what it would be like to travel and have no destination and no worries through life. And the speaker staying at the river or lake, laying in the bed of their truck until the sun sets and the only thing that reminds them of the day is the memory of the sun that plays within the water.

As I said, something different every time. I think I will continue to revisit this piece and see what else your words can bring to my mind. Thank you for sharing this piece.

+YourMidnightSecret+

[Astro]

I apologize to you and any who've missed my presence or style of wordplay. I'm never truly gone like the images cast upon the backs of ones eyelids and will foray into the creative culture here in respect to my fellow writers who continue to fight and delight with language tongue fu. Thank you for this personal review, do return at anytime.

[Astro]

Definitely brief in length. I could come back to it someday and perhaps lengthen it, but it captured the moment and environment I was in at the time quite perfectly. Thanks for the review, glad you liked it.

[willweb]

This was extremely good. Short but strong in meaning. I enjoyed reading this tonight.

[willweb]

This was extremely good. Short but strong in meaning. I enjoyed reading this tonight.

[emmajoy]

Seems as if you've closed your eyes and looked a second time, experience painting the what's been befor; maybe the feeling felt has highlighed reality. Strange how triggers from others can nudge ..

[Astro]

I try my best to describe things in a unique way. The sky that day could only be described somewhere in between a thought and a moment of clear reality. I hope that my words can be triggers and also, offer solace, wisdom, beauty and creativity all of the things that are inspiring. Thank you for the review Emma Joy.

[emmajoy]

Tis the same when one suddenly sees mist capture a mountain top ..

[Astro]

Mist/Cloud cover is all that I was trying to describe to Jack that day in the valley of the Canadian Rockies.

[Frieda P]

This one is different coming from your pen Astro....I quite enjoyed the imagery here.

[Astro]

It was just something that I had written to Jack in a review of one of his works, which he then suggested I make it a poem...et voila! Glad you still enjoyed it.

[Frieda P]

Ahh, leave it to Jack to inspire you to pen it, nice job.....

[Jack...]

That's what I'm talkng about. Astro, I can see this, as if I were standing right where you are. You have captured your nature'd lanscape in such a beautiful form. Nicely done my friend.

[Astro]

Thanks a lot Jack, for the suggestion and the review.