Promise of Discovery

My skin...

filled with attention.

Nerves rising from sleep.

Thirsty and eagerly desiring

the touch...of you.

Your mesmerizing being,

that mosaic of sand,

stardust 

the universe of your body

seen from far away, 

like ballooning over top

crop circles.

You are a mystery.

I, the new discoverer of worlds

searching your landscape

equipped with tools of speculation

until....I touch

Upon your essence

Will these hands

unveil a purpose?

Will curiosity and desire

lie in the grass spent?

The purchase, too much to handle

consuming me?

I have felt the pull of my thread

by your deft fingers.

I am resigned to come undone

whatever the risk.

I will pile myself on your floor

...or become wrapped about you.

One must let go of all fear

to face the inevitable.

It is more appealing to embrace

than to shield.

Where time and space are obstacles,

the moment we meet...

Will be defined by our path

and what it took

to find each other. 

Reviews

[FateDictates]

wow feels like an unfinished story, quietly beautiful..

[Astro]

Thank you Meonlyme, it is a story in progress, written upon the heart and cherished by the soul.

[FateDictates]

inspired by your muse!!

[Astro]

As only she could.

[MsJewel]

I love romantic poetry and I'm reading this as a love poem - a poem filled with longing..
The beauty of your words touched my heart.
This is lovely.

:) Julie

[Astro]

Why thank you Julie, I'm glad you enjoyed it and that it has had such an effect on you.

[R. L. Hill]

What I like about this piece in particular is how it can be spread across so many meanings. It allows itself for personal and private interpretation. Discovery of another human being is exactly a journey, an exploration and an unveiling all the little nuances in personality, fears, etc. You captured the adventure eloquently. I love, particularly, how you referenced stardust, universe, unknown worlds and space. Such beauty encased in a vast expanse requiring diligence for full discovery. Very beautiful. I would even go so much as to say that this could be read as a love poem. I know that I would appreciate such a gesture. (I would have love to rip this one a new one ;D but I can't.) Well done!

[Astro]

Thank you for your thoughtful and astute review Quirklet. Again, and I know you don't feel I need to, I am sorry if my review was less than flattering for your own piece. This poem was meant to be all of the things that you said it was(including a love poem). Should you find it easier to rip me a new one, on my next piece I'll be on the ready. ;)

[R. L. Hill]

Haha. No worries. We eat the sour grapes with the sweet grapes, ya know. I appreciate your talent and your opinion. I will get really nit-picky on the next one though, so watch out! Haha.

[Astro]

Will do, got a bowl of grapes on the ready.

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

"Will curiosity and desire
lie in the grass spent?" Felt these words, brother. You've given wonderful life to the pursuit of another and it's processes.

[Astro]

Thanks PH, nice to know I can still turn out the odd line or two.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

A mind like yours would never cease to.

[Astro]

Thanks for the compliment.

[Troy Henson]

Its the path that we choose to walk in life that helps define who we are. The question does beg however?? Was that the right path for us to choose or in fact did we cross paths at some point? I don't think it really matters as we learn along the way.

Regards
Troy

[Astro]

That journey is life, like an ant on a ball of yarn. Each step a winding way around the same existence we all share just in different directions. The trick is to keep the spots on the horizon fixed, then if you make a wrong turn, it's easier to take a step back and begin again. Thanks again for the thoughtful review Troy.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

So many paths that we must walks...so many courses set and course changes made in order to get where we were really meant to be. Sometimes we cross paths with the object of our desire, and sometimes those paths are but stardust painted in paralell lines across the night sky, but we are better for the dreaming and for the wanting, I think. We are indeed defined by our paths, those we choose and those that we find ourselves on despite our attempts to diverge, but you know what they say, "where there is a will, there is a way". Beautiful writing, my friend.

[Astro]

Your assurance and positivity are a mirrors to my soul. Thank you again for such a thoughtful review and gracious compliment.

[Jack...]

We all walk our own paths...it is we find crossing that path that can change our life forever. Very cool Astro.

[Astro]

Thanks a lot Jack, I've been trying to tune out the distractions and get more serious with my writing again. I hope you are right, I am truly ready to move on.